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Re: What If ..

Postby SajN » Aug 12th, '09, 22:32

Eyo, check ur mob
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Re: What If ..

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 22:34

wow man I really love it the whole concept is awesome...really good read,loved the subject and everything is dope :y: :flower:
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Re: What If ..

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 22:34

wtf you two communicate withe mobiles?
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Re: What If ..

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 22:43

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:
BILI wrote:wtf you two communicate withe mobiles?


he wants to play fifa on the ps3 lol. yeah we text. :y:

oh ok :shifty:
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Re: What If ..

Postby gutawafang » Aug 13th, '09, 01:57

The starting conversation is the meaning of the whole thing man. I mean, without the intro, I wouldn't have TOTALLY felt this song. The entire piece's so fucking awesome man. I don't know what else to say.
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Re: What If ..

Postby Terry_M » Aug 13th, '09, 05:24

This is really good. As said before, the intro and outro REALLY add to it. Keep up the good word.
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Re: What If ..

Postby Flowsmooth » Aug 13th, '09, 16:31

heartfelt man. real nice :)
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Re: What If ..

Postby Solace » Aug 14th, '09, 04:20

Word I really enjoyed that, and I loved the concept. At first I thought by "what if i never broke up with you" you meant that they were together and you were asking if you two would never break up or something but then my dumbass understood it lol. Great piece :y:
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Re: What If ..

Postby Flowsmooth » Aug 19th, '09, 14:43

Sad truth man, we all had our days like these.
so it's nothing new
we deal wit it word?
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Re: What If ..

Postby *MIRANDA* » Aug 19th, '09, 14:59

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:i cry inside when you kiss that guy; cause that guy has just kissed my life ..


ive felt like that ^ well ifya replace girl with guy :unsure:
you worded that beautifuly it was my fav line
good job babe :flower:
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Re: What If ..

Postby Solace » Aug 19th, '09, 15:07

Coleon wrote:RECORD THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You dont wanna hear him rap I swear :laughing:

Just kiddding dude :b:
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Re: What If ..

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 19th, '09, 16:51

The monologue in the beginnining is really cool...would sound good on audio...I liked this a lot man keep it up...oh and also the monologue wasn't too long or too short
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