Untitled & Unfinished feedback please :)

[D'Leh]

nice rhymes dude, maybe you can work on the structure a little, but its a great verse, keep it coming

look at my work you can find it as Step To My Death or Fat Fuck finisshed version any of those...im from another country i speak spanihs so chek it!

[gutawafang]

Man, I couldn't totally flow to it because of bad structure. I didn't understand some of it and had to read some lines twice before knowing what they mean.

I don't totally see the rhyming skills you have maybe because of structure. Flow of the 2nd verse was better than the first one.

Keep writing man.

[gutawafang]

Just keep writing homie. Peace.