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Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 19th, '09, 22:12

(Talking)
Hey,hey
yo,yo
Pain is deep,its deep
I`m left alone,all alone

Hook:
I`m left alone in this cold world(world)
All I got now is my own word(word)
Yo
I`m all by myself in this crazy place(place)
All I want is to survive but it aint easy case(case)

Verse one:
Yo trust me I know many people understand my pain
So I`m refering to them,people without fortune and fame
Right now my life`s insane,pains deep,like I`m burnin in flames
On my knees,begging for death,holding to my last breath
Finaly my knees broke and I fall on floor,I disapiered in dark hole
My death wish is granted,but I still feel like my life` not whole
I coulda do more,not just give up like this,my heart still resists
The death,I feel theres chance for me,to make it in this world
My words are still not heard,I just gotta get up,thats why I`m here
I was gone for a moment and now I reappeared,wit new chance
(chances,you aways get a second chance)-sayin this will hook is played

Hook:
I`m left alone in this cold world(world)
All I got now is my own word(word)
Yo
I`m all by myself in this crazy place(place)
All I want is to survive but it aint easy case(case)


Verse two:
Now I got this second chance,I gotta figure my life all in advance
If I dont it`ll be on my own expanse,I feel ready for the final dance
Wit life itself,in this word all you gotta do is not lose yourself
Now I`m doing something good for myself,but pain`s still there
Man it just feels unfair,sadness raises,omg I`m unaware
Of what should I do,where should I go,theres just no place for me
Should I comitt my life to finance,finance is my last chance
Oh man what should I do next,the richer I get,sadder I get,like it reflects
Now what should I expect,maybe suicade will get some effect
I did it before,and I`ll do it again,these are my last words Amen
(chances,just sometimes you get third chance)-sayin this will hook is played

Hook:
I`m left alone in this cold world(world)
All I got now is my own word(word)
Yo
I`m all by myself in this crazy place(place)
All I want is to survive but it aint easy case(case)


Verse three:
Wit this third chance I`m comin back to my room
Where I`m alone again,nobodys here to support me
Wondering why my mother didn`t abort me
Now in this real life all I want it to become a decent MC
Some people say they like my raps,but I think its coincidence
I wanna become great in this,learn the best way to express
How do I feel,my life is nothin but a stress,me tryin to impress
So many people,its fucked up.cause at the end of the day
All I really have is my own word in this cold world
(chances,wow man you gotta grab em,dont ever let em get away)-sayin this

Hook:
I`m left alone in this cold world(world)
All I got now is my own word(word)
Yo
I`m all by myself in this crazy place(place)
All I want is to survive but it aint easy case(case)


What I tryed to do is like first 2 verses are fictions and in third I come and say what I really feel...Idk,some shit like that....lol
Rhymes aren`t that good...but this is just some emotional stuff so I dont care
This is my first time to do whole song :smoking:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby classthe_king » Aug 19th, '09, 23:28

I like it :y: , shows how much your improving. Keep it up.
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 19th, '09, 23:30

classthe_king wrote:I like it :y: , shows how much your improving. Keep it up.

thy man,I personally think that first verse is the best,and third is the worst..I kinda lost inspiration :flower:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 02:32

Damn good flow man. The hook wasn't that awesome but I like how I'm able to create a melody out of it. :y:

It's pretty deep but direct at the same time, prolly because of your choice of words. But yeah, your rhymes have improved. Keep that up man. :flower:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 20th, '09, 16:50

thx a lot guys :flower:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby D'Leh » Aug 20th, '09, 21:02

this song its dope, i think the best verse is the first one, good flow, good rhyme and strcuture...great song man!!! :y:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 20th, '09, 21:41

zurditoshady wrote:this song its dope, i think the best verse is the first one, good flow, good rhyme and strcuture...great song man!!! :y:

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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 21st, '09, 21:47

bump :flower:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby King Bullet » Aug 26th, '09, 22:00

Gotta agree with others,first verse is the best one.Flow's good,simple and lotta emotions.I like that,it's really some grimey shit.I like...keep up man. :y:
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Re: Some whole song I did

Postby BILI » Aug 26th, '09, 22:01

King Bullet wrote:Gotta agree with others,first verse is the best one.Flow's good,simple and lotta emotions.I like that,it's really some grimey shit.I like...keep up man. :y:
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