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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 02:37

I'm still thinking why I feel sad for no reason
My heart's freezing, it's totaly bad for snow season
Still wondering if my rap would grow decent
The loved ones that I have just won't listen
I'ma just let this rhyme escalate till my mind devastate
Till my lines decorate, till a sign to estimate
To appproximate, to analyze how rocks would break
With my punch-lines into fragments, now watch me state
Having second thoughts too, with words that I brought you
Can't take it back cuz it's inked to report you
Twisting words to change the story, to distort you
Flexible should do the work in case I contort you
Question you, ask me back, that's fucking acid crap
Hurled to your face, this is a fucking magic rap
Make you disappear like Criss Angel in a box
And appear again so sexy like Megan Fox

As usual, feedback's appreciated. :flower:
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Postby classthe_king » Aug 20th, '09, 02:40

Wow, that was really good.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 02:41

classthe_king wrote:Wow, that was really good.

Arigato! :)
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Postby D'Leh » Aug 20th, '09, 02:46

crazy rhymes, and sick flow...i love your work man!!!! :y:
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 02:46

zurditoshady wrote:crazy rhymes, and sick flow...i love your work man!!!! :y:

haha. thanks for liking my works. :y:
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 08:06

Boo!
U.F.O!!!
Massive!!!
Pokemon!!!
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Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 20th, '09, 08:38

haha, that was good rhyming, i enjoyed it! :y:
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oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 08:39

Kaotic wrote:haha, that would good rhyming, i enjoyed it! :y:

Thank you man. :flower:
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Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 20th, '09, 11:13

just another sweet verse from my mans :y:
"misoginistic mysteries missunderstood by missing mistresses,
throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 17:08

emzee-frenzy wrote:just another sweet verse from my mans :y:

haha yeah. Thanks alot homie. :worship:
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Postby Flowsmooth » Aug 20th, '09, 17:58

"I'ma just let this rhyme escalate till my mind devastate
Till my lines decorate, till a sign to estimate"

feelin' it feelin' it Fish :worship:
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 20th, '09, 17:58

Flowsmooth wrote:"I'ma just let this rhyme escalate till my mind devastate
Till my lines decorate, till a sign to estimate"

feelin' it feelin' it Fish :worship:

HAHA. yeah. ARIGATO! :)
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 23rd, '09, 13:31

gutawafang wrote:Bam!
Uranus!!!
Moo!!!
Pikachu!!!
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Postby BILI » Aug 23rd, '09, 13:52

It was really dope drop bro :y: :y:

Till my lines decorate, till a sign to estimate
To appproximate, to analyze how rocks would break
With my punch-lines into fragments, now watch me state
Having second thoughts too, with words that I brought you :worship: :worship: :worship:
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Postby gutawafang » Aug 24th, '09, 01:58

BILI wrote:It was really dope drop bro :y: :y:

Till my lines decorate, till a sign to estimate
To appproximate, to analyze how rocks would break
With my punch-lines into fragments, now watch me state
Having second thoughts too, with words that I brought you :worship: :worship: :worship:

Arigato. :worship:
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