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going to heaven. (different style to normal, not love, lol)

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Re: going to heaven. (different style to normal, not love, lol)

Postby classthe_king » Aug 22nd, '09, 23:18

wow, that was great :y:
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Re: going to heaven. (different style to normal, not love, lol)

Postby D'Leh » Aug 23rd, '09, 00:22

really awesome dude!! :y:
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Re: going to heaven. (different style to normal, not love, lol)

Postby BILI » Aug 23rd, '09, 00:25

its dope man
lmfao@not love
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Postby Joe M » Aug 23rd, '09, 01:03

yeah, this was dope man.
deep, emotional. flow was strong throughout.
I think you should have worked more on multi's though. that would have made it alot better.
but this def was a dope piece. keep it up man.
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Postby Emadyville » Aug 23rd, '09, 03:44

Very good :y:

I liked the content, rhyming in beginning was real nice and overall was very good :y:

Keep it up
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Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 23rd, '09, 10:50

well done scotty :flower:
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