almost

[tjb]

this is all ive got to so far heres the beat:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2OlZaeZlsFQ&feature=fvw

feed please but when you read it make sure you got the beat it will flow way better k thanks




almost perfect pretty exquisite
if i was a place youd wanna revisit
and if was u and u was me youd wanna relive it
again again, ova and ova
if a few days i could be one runnin on this town ova hova
an nas tried to tell me this rap game was hopeless
you know whats hopeless? the fact ur hopelessly moping
ive gone through hate and this an tht ive came up while your still coping
ive got a story but so do errbody
but mines not finished yet a work in progress
me a damaged conscience pondering almost constantly
about right and wrong and this and that a wonderful mind
behind set upon tacking myself up on a map to be remembered.
i rember last september, almot like a tumor
right into my eyes the rap game showed me my future
and all the things i could to do to contribute my contributions
almost like the epa for noise pollution a strong solution
fusing rock and rap like a tat on a skin slab
but i havent shown any of the world that yet
dont alienate any future fans with a to early viewing of my plans dayumm

explosions exploding erroding any music corrosion
an i wont name any names or play the blame game
but we wont blame it on the alcohol and ill leave it at that
but well crack a bottle let your body waddle an pass out on my mat
covered in already bloody, sharp cracked glass

[D'Leh]

good shit, just work on the flow a little bit¡

[tjb]

yea when i make the audio it will sound better

[Slim Zaddy]

man you've improved a lot ,, really nice shit dude ,, but i you want to make it audio ,, just fix the flow ,, but if you can flow over it either ways , then that's great ,, but it's was good , hot lyrics ,and rhymes ,, content was perfect ,, keep it up ,, you only lack the flow for me ,, but it's a good track