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Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

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Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

Postby King Bullet » Aug 26th, '09, 22:56

This is somethin' I wrote when I was really stuck in a slump...hope y'all can feel me...

Since the day I was born,like the shit was meant to be wrong,
I walked thousends of miles,this road's just too long.
I was on the edge of becomin' addicted,
I had two options,to go through another livin' hell or to continue just with this one so I crumbelin' picked it,
though I didn't totally let off drugs,coz livin' without 'em at all for me is a pure fiction.
I lost a friend to that shit so it helped me to make my desicion.
It took three years for me to understand that I almost ended up in prison.
I robbed a shop as a kid and got arrested.
We thought we had all the smarts of the world and we tried to test it.
I failed,but I never snitched on my so called friends then.
I wanted a perfect relationship and I got it,but everythin' else started fallin' apart.
I went totally down,touched the bottom,I was no longer the one callin' the shot.
My mind got totally off track,somethin' just popped.
Probably coz I'm just a human too,I'm not a superman,
you take as much shit as you can,but then you come to the point when you can't stand.
I needed someone to be my constant pillar,I needed someone who can grant,
safety and better life,so I started prayin' more than before.
And it was the only thing stopping me to lose it,only thing keeping me cold.
I never forgot anythin' and I'll never forget it cause I'm keeping it all.
It's time to wake up again out of this nightmare coz I was never sleepin' in songs.
Who am I?A horrible son,drug addict and a felon,
facin' reallity all alone,livin' my own hell of,
a life,tryin' to hold on,tryin' and not tryin' to get off,
this what I got on,are you still sure that you're jealous???

Tell me what ya think....
At least I know that I don't know...question is: are you bozos smart enough to feel stupid?!-hope so!!!
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Re: Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

Postby classthe_king » Aug 26th, '09, 23:38

The rhymes weren't very good and the structure was horrible. Good piece other then that.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

Postby Solace » Aug 26th, '09, 23:40

Yeah man I have to go with classthe_king here, but it was decent :y:
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Re: Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

Postby heva » Aug 26th, '09, 23:40

shit..one more homie :wave:

not bad
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Re: Somethin' I wrote couple of months ago...

Postby King Bullet » Aug 26th, '09, 23:44

yeah I know,I was devastated at the time...but I felt like puttin' it out...anyways thank y'all for objective critic. :worship:
At least I know that I don't know...question is: are you bozos smart enough to feel stupid?!-hope so!!!
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