Fa-Q - Tomorrow

[Fa-Q]

I don't know if you remember but I posted a song called "today" and this is sortanotreallybutkindaifyousquint the sequel. This was a dream that a basically wrote down after I had it.


I have no singers in my band,
I have no fingers on my hand,
I fall into a river of sparrows,
And shoot them all with a quiver of arrows,
I get out of the water and see a forest with loose stumps,
The trees look like goose bumps,
The water turns trees to a splinter,
Until fall passes and freezes winter,
So Tell me how a snow flake dries,
Or how this lake cries,
Its killing me inside,
My split personality seeks if I'm willing to hide,
Smoke swirls, and cloaks pearls,
And fills clams, until dams,
Flood the valley and kill lambs,
Their dead body gives me idle motion,
Drinking the water is my vital potion,

So if tomorrow is my last day,
My souls gotta say what it hast to say,
So don't close your eyes your in anothers dream,
Just wait for what your covers bring,

My oath to goals,
Is like a fish drowning in both bowls,
Is this gibberish,
Or is it whoever wins is the bigger fish,
My brains behind bars,
No brain damage just mind scars,
I'm driving blind cars,
Trying to find stars,
I see a dandy lion smoking flowers,
He's hallucinating seeing floating towers,
This place calms me,
I see an island with 7 palm trees,
I head north but end up backtracking south,
I lose all my baby teeth and they attack my mouth,
The tooth fairy, is a slueth rarely,
She robs the youth fairly,
In an exchange for about a quarter,
She puts it under my pillow in my house without mortar,
My eyes keep me back to sleep,
I dream of a brown wooden fence and leaping black sheep,
I dream my bikes squeak,
While I traverse around pikes peak,
And seems Only my echo likes to speak,20


So if tomorrow is my last day,
My souls gotta say what it hast to say,
So don't close your eyes your in anothers dream,
Just wait for what your covers bring,

My paper planes say "fly papers,"
All sly daters, die rapers,
I find the needle in the haystack,
I'm poor but greedll be my payback,
I mary jane, poison berry stain,
Don't wanna be revived I'm very vain,
I help the dead so I carry pain,
I open up my heart,
I'm hopin the part,
That pumps blood,
Won't be buried under clumps of mud,
Wouldn't wake up if it wasn't for the alarm clocks,
My arm locks,
I have a pistol with no trigger,
I need a knockout hopefully my fistll go bigger,
I follow the sun by running east to west,
Everybody is gone so I go from least to best,
So when north sees south,
Ill go what came out dorthys mouth,


So if tomorrow is my last day,
My souls gotta say what it hast to say,
So don't close your eyes your in anothers dream,
Just wait for what your covers bring,

[Slim Zaddy]

it's a good drop , i liked your chorus .. nice drop , but try to fix the flow a little bit .

[Fa-Q]

Thanks zaddy and yea this is sort of the rough drafþ

[Fa-Q]

And Zaddy that's weird that you liked the chorus cause I really wasn't feelin it...thanks tho

[mcZu]

Nice, like Zaddy pointed out, the flow needs some work. Besides that it's pretty dope.

[Fa-Q]

thanks Zu....means alot

[Fa-Q]

heres the original

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=65114

oh thanks Scotty.....

[D'Leh]

great drop man!!!, like the other said the flow is kinda messy

[Fa-Q]

well alot of people are saying the structure is bad.....and im glad for the feedback but the beat Im using is called "ruins" by shadowville and i swear to god this shit fits like a glove and i wrote it to that beat

[Yah-hah]

Yeah I looked up the beat and I see wat you were saying. I like it. When does day after tomorrow come out :P

[Drama Setter]

good job

[Fa-Q]

Wow thanks jus lol and yea doesn't the beat match perfectly...like a glove