Class The King- Lost Hope

[classthe_king]

Wrote the whole song in one sitting, my record. Also the first time ive ever wrote to a beat. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hwkZNYHeKSA
Props to Mc Zu on inspiring this song
And if you leave feed could you just say something you didnt like along with whatever else you were goona say so i know what to improve on. Thanks
Edit: Also i wanna do a Collab so if anyone wants do one pm me with the topic you want to do it on

I keep getting knocked down, but ill always step in the booth
And start lettin it loose, my prides to high im never lettin it lose
I was stupid when I was younger; always regrettin my views
But now ive got a new weapon to use and it’s affectin the fuse
In which I fire out at the public, so fuck settin a truce
Im strangling you wack ass rappers like a neck in a noose
I keep wreckin the youth with my rapping so dastardly
You’re impervious to the words we spit, well its backwards see
You love us, listen and follow to every single word we say
When we could give a fuck about you and it is preferred this way
Cause I listened to every word of my fans till I am deterred away
From all the hate, it’s fallin straight on me its absurd this way
Its piling up, ive been kicked by the horse in which ive mounted
I’m gifted no doubt son, but there’s no way I can lift the mountain
But now I can move on sense ive conquered the struggle within
And tamed the flaming fury burning under my skin

You sound innocent when you vent, cracking like thin cement
Few can contend with the one that doesn’t sound in pretend
And that’s when you know that now you’ve got a special thing
And then you receive love cause that’s what respect will bring
Ain’t gotta check a thing, sittin happy on top of the world
But one screw up will cause you and your pride to drop to the floor
You don’t get rocked anymore, copiously copped anymore
Fans don’t run screaming, stunned gleaming, when they flock anymore
Don’t get popped when we soar, sent to the underground and slumps
Because you start acting like trash when you hang around the dumps
Then you finally receive a goat when they get out the struggle twice
Few can do it; you can choose it, if you keep you knuckles tight

[Noeezy]

Damnn son
the flow, beat, structure is fuckin ill
only thing that u might change is last line of first verse, seemed too short when i flowed it to the beat
but yeah, major props man

[Fa-Q]

Daaamn dude those multis are insane...and also used well...sometimes people take away from the meaning with the multis but yours didn't...crazy dope oh and I agree with music pimp about the last line

[Slim Zaddy]

pretty nice homie ,, multies are insane ,, i liked them ,, flow is great , lyrics is pretty nice ,, but if you wanna record it ,, you have to shorten the lines a little bit ,, in order for ya to have a better delivery and flow over the mic ,, other than it's sick ,, keep them coming ,,

for the collab ,, i will do a collab wit ya ,, i will pm you on the subject ...

[classthe_king]

Thank you everyone I appreciate it alot.
Alright Zaddy, I'll be waiten

[mcZu]

Good shit, kept on subject, flowed good, lyrically dope and the rhyme scheme is dope.

[Slim Zaddy]

Thank you everyone I appreciate it alot.
Alright Zaddy, I'll be waiten

man i pm you with the details

[gutawafang]

Lost Hope, Revealed Dope.

[classthe_king]

Thanks Zu and Guta

[Relapse.LP]

Great verse.

I think a few more internal rhymes wouldn't hurt though.

Good flow though.

[classthe_king]

Great verse.

I think a few more internal rhymes wouldn't hurt though.

Good flow though.

Thanks Yeah i usually put more internal rhymes in my stuff, if you wanna check it out , but i was mostly just trying to work on my flow. I might go back and put more internal rhymes in it if i decide to ever record it.