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Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 1st, '09, 19:28

This is a verse I wrote for this song I'm recording next week, I think it's one of my best so I thought I'd try and get some feedback see what you all think :y:

It’s become outrageous it’s like a plague is,
Contagious, I’m lit but the pages flameless,
It’s heinous what I can do with my cadence,
After my finger prints a rhyme in latent’s,
It’s patience as I maintain the maintenance,
It’s the safest way that I’ll become the greatest,
Don’t believe in that you must be an atheist,
You didn’t see it before then this verse is Lasik’s,
I don’t need famous to be on your playlist,
If my minds half off it’s for sale on Craig’s list,
So face this, you don't know what’s courageous,
It’s plain as day or your head that spacious?
My fans can be like JFK that brainless,
When my hearts so driven it has sponsored Avis,
But this games a bitch so sometimes I hate this,
And you’d swear it said "No" cause I did just rape this…
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby mcZu » Sep 1st, '09, 19:31

Dope. Can't complain, flow smooth, lyrics dope, vocab good, multies good and the rhyme scheme is dope.
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 1st, '09, 19:37

mcZu wrote:Dope. Can't complain, flow smooth, lyrics dope, vocab good, multies good and the rhyme scheme is dope.


I appreciate it thank you :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 1st, '09, 20:05

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:can't wait to hear this :p


Yeah I just found a better beat for it actually, and it's gunna be 3 verses now instead of 2 :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby D'Leh » Sep 1st, '09, 22:04

great rhymes, flow, multias structure...dope shit!!! :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 2nd, '09, 03:15

zurditoshady wrote:great rhymes, flow, multias structure...dope shit!!! :y:


Thanks :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 2nd, '09, 11:34

i did'tn see ya from a long time in the audio section , where have you been pal ... for this shit . it's sick .. flow , rhymes, multies, are all dope :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby gutawafang » Sep 2nd, '09, 11:36

I like how the words you use rhymes unexpectedly. It's dope. :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 2nd, '09, 15:33

Thank you both, and I've been recording shit still, I just don't often post them on here for feedback but I will be soon don't worry :y:

Thanks again to everyone who took the time to read and feed :y:
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby classthe_king » Sep 2nd, '09, 23:48

Rhymes were great, flow was great. Overall dope track.
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Re: Walking in Circles

Postby Emadyville » Sep 3rd, '09, 01:12

classthe_king wrote:Rhymes were great, flow was great. Overall dope track.


thanks :y:
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