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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 4th, '09, 19:37

YOU BIT THE FIRST LINE FROM EMINEM!!!!! :o :o :o :o


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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 4th, '09, 19:38

Oh well..

I like the last lines, but the rest were meeh.. It was pretty simple and nothing special.
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 4th, '09, 19:44

I did, but they weren't really anything special, as I said.
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby mcZu » Sep 4th, '09, 20:11

Try to rephrase the first half, the other half is great. Good substance, flow seemed good and the rhymes were good.
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '09, 04:03

SajN wrote:Oh well..

I like the last lines, but the rest were meeh.. It was pretty simple and nothing special.

I aint seen you do shit better :whistle:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 5th, '09, 16:38

honestly i have seen better from you as a emotional song , you're always sick in writing emotional pieces , ,, but that's doesn’t mean this is whack nah it's good , i liked the ending ,, but you can do better i know ,, :y: .......... anyway enjoyed this piece ,, keep them coming :wave:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 5th, '09, 16:41

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:
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SajN wrote:Oh well..

I like the last lines, but the rest were meeh.. It was pretty simple and nothing special.

I aint seen you do shit better :whistle:


YEAAHH!! :angry:

I have writer's block :(


And I can do love or other emotional songs soooo much better than this piece of shit :angry:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '09, 16:58

You can't write because you have writers block?

No, you just can't write. :whistle:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 5th, '09, 17:06

Solace wrote:You can't write because you have writers block?

No, you just can't write. :whistle:


SaJn if i were you ,, i will just write something to show him that you can write ,, :whistle:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '09, 17:09

Imagine a place that is disgraced by shit/
Junk and smell, chasing kids/
You think you just imagine it/
Why even bother changing it/
But hey, you’ll probably get amazed by this/
Open your eyes, there it is/
The place with shit that you just pictured/
Oslo.. so ugly, who’s gon fix up/
I can’t clean this shit all by myself/
So here I am, waiting for you guys to help/


Yeah uh SajN you are amazingly dope. "You just pictured....who's gon fix up" i just love that multi. :unsure:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 5th, '09, 17:46

Well, I wrote that when i had writers block, plus it was for a contest, so I didnt choose the topic myself...



Btw, I never said it was bad, it just wasnt good.. Scotts piece
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 5th, '09, 18:11

Here I am stating my opinion about the verse, and y'all hating?

Fuck that, remind me not feed your songs anymore Scott..
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Solace » Sep 5th, '09, 18:13

You ain't seriously mad, are you? :unsure:
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby SajN » Sep 5th, '09, 18:15

Solace wrote:You ain't seriously mad, are you? :unsure:

No, I am just mad.
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Re: verse to a new song i'm writing

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 5th, '09, 18:19

SajN wrote:Here I am stating my opinion about the verse, and y'all hating?

Fuck that, remind me not feed your songs anymore Scott..


i think also solace::: SaJN , because he started it :whistle: ,, but keep in mind, i'm not in it , so you can feed my songs bro :flower:
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