let me get some feedback

[staten island shady]

imma b real with u
if i dont like u
i throw the steal at u
thts how i deal with u
cuz i m the best
fuck the rest
i past any test or tribulation
flows got ya mind rasing
when i get to ventalation
im penatration ya skull with my words cause i m a wordsmith
bitches hate me cause i m perverted
they say im worthless
equipt with curses stealing dates purses
i murder verses
leave u hollier than church is
exploding through this cursive
im so sick, bring the nurses
venoms what this verse is
im so explicit
stop my flow here... bring it back cause u missed it
dont get it twisted
u dont wannt battle u should backout
before its lights out like a blackout
now let it burn up like a crackhouse
im hotter than a roast
burt out like toast
get weed from both coasts
i always get that sticky
smoke weed like the 1960s
always lokin shifty
middle name is thrifty
mr unmaleable, u could never twist me
imma end my flow here to get real high and pissy

[Spyder]

just not good

[Slovinec]

To be honest i read the first 5 lines and stopped, its to much swag stealling, your trying to take em's style.. 0.5/10

[staten island shady]

thanks i guess?

[Solace]

Horrible. Fix your structure first of all, work on multies a shit load, you know what work on it all, "flows got ya mind rasing" The fuck is rasing. Man the flow was horrible, so your flow got me laughing. Just work on it.

[staten island shady]

rasing like a fucken car

[Solace]

racing*?

Don't get pissed off just because you never went to school and had an education to at least spell "racing" correctly.

[staten island shady]

racing* complete burnout moment
i aint claiming to b the best but i think .5/10 is a little extreme

i cant spell for shit but i can garentuee you i'm smarter than you are

[Solace]

That would be sort of an insult I guess. I am sure you "garentuee" that you're smarter than I am.

But you're right, .5/10 is extreme for rating, I'd give it at least a 3.

[staten island shady]

i aint claimin to b a great rapper, not even a good one, but imma give you some of my advice now... u have 7727 posts in like a year and 1/2... and i see youve been "bitchin" since 1995... if that meens u have been rapping for 14 years and still havnt made it... maybe instead of bloggin so much you should make a demo or something and send it to a label... im pullin for ya, man

[Solace]

Damn man I'm actually giving you honest feed and you're taking it like a bitch.

And no you idiot, I haven't been rapping for 14 years, I've been WRITING for 1.

I'm 14 years old.

[staten island shady]

hip hops been lost but we here about to save it
cuz our lyrics and our flows, on our verses make u crave it
straight out of the dungeon where hip hop started
new york, new york, out here dont act retarted
cause if u start beef, my crew will definatly finish
cause we crazy motha fuckers who aint got no fucken limits
i swear to god we here for brinigin hip hop back
cause right about now it seems like hip hops wack
nobody whose raping, got any fucken heart
and having heart in this game is how hip hop got its start
nobody makes songs just for the love of rap
thats y all this musics just some one-hit-wonder crap
every1 makes records just to try to get some air-time
and beacuse all this pop shit it seems like no1 can rhyme
but we gunnna bring it back and b some hiphops saviors
so catch us in the booth just destroyin all the haters


now i know u'l probably hate on that too and thats all good... but im out for now cuz i got a life other than this site... so until later good luck with ya career

[Solace]

My career? I'm just writing for fun, and that verse is eh. Nothing bad but nothing good.

Oh and thanks for ignoring how you were just owned by a kid barely through puberty, (oh if you waste time dissing me might as well use that too. I know you need all the help you can get with punchlines and whatnot).

[Solace]

Nah I'm giving him shit because he's acting like an idiot.

[Solace]

Nah I'm giving him shit because he's acting like an idiot.

you insulted him first.

I swear there was a topic where he said "give me brutal honesty"

I wasn't being a dick on purpose, I was giving him what I really thought of it.