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Gimmie Suma Dat

Postby lilrossy » Sep 7th, '09, 06:20

(Gimmie Suma Dat)
real hip hop, from da new kid on da block,
shit dat gon make ya jaw bones nd lips drop,
so lets rock, my flow wil never stop, like a blood clot,
cuz da shit ya'll wrote, worse den a bad joke, like noc, noc,
who's dare? lilrossy, now who dare's to mock?,
got da ball, but ya cant stop me, cuz u scared to block,
affraid ta get shot, nocked down nd dropped,
here ta stay, never stop, aint doc dre, never be forgot,
(Gimmie Suma Dat)
real shit, da best shit, dat da fresh kid spit,
flow so sick, str8 off da lip when i rip,
i jus chop up a stick, roll it thick nd take a hit,
nd let da rhymes flow, like blood when a wrist is slit,
dis da sickest shit, be a trip if dis aint make me rich,
think ya can take me bitch, leave ya stitched up in a ditch,
so if ya dont want ya face ripped up by a drill bit,
beta switch like will smith, nd listen to dis real shit.

let us no wat ya think.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Gimmie Suma Dat

Postby Xray » Sep 7th, '09, 06:29

After the "Gimmie Suma Dat" bit, it was sick. Flowed well, but your vocab could use improvement. And some punches too, nice multis though. Btw AUS all day homie. :smoking:
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Re: Gimmie Suma Dat

Postby lilrossy » Sep 7th, '09, 06:34

thnx for da feedbak man, glad u liked it. i'll try nd work on my vocab, jus wanted ta keep it simple. au$$ie pride mothafuka! :D
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Gimmie Suma Dat

Postby emzee-frenzy » Sep 7th, '09, 08:40

leave you stiched up in a ditch

loved that, and the whole verse so freshhh :flower:
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throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
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Re: Gimmie Suma Dat

Postby lilrossy » Sep 7th, '09, 11:26

Thnx alot man, appreciate it. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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