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Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby D'Leh » Sep 10th, '09, 20:12

this is a bonus track on my album these are the lyrics, is a feat. introducin RX, and my sister Florijb :y:
(RX)
music to my ears do you hear that sound,
i sure bet i made my family proud,
grew up with my friends saying i have potential,
followed my dream my mom was very influential,
i dedicated my mind to the game,
and i commited my soul to the fame,
thought to myself practice makes perfect,
im respected more than i expected,
no beats just lyrics i want to be successful,
verses so sick im mindfully skilledful

(Florijb)
Some say im impatient,
but i fix mistakes like an abortifacient,
so i remain complacent,
cus im wallowing in success,
i feel no stress,
check my finesse,
i make money in excess...anyway i digress,
my girl will never redress livin under my roof,
i never believe anything unless provided with logical proof,
im lackin in faith,
i believe in existence,
i admire persistence,
and have acquired subsistence,
practicing coexistence

(D'Leh, that's me!)
some say Patience is the number one virtue,
but in the end Patience will be the one to hurt you,
people wait there whole life for their big brake,
but they make a bigger mess than a pig make,
when you wasten your life just waiten around,
you hear the clock tick man im haten that sound,
and thats where u gonna stay man u staten your ground,
your at the bottem of the bottem theres no debatten this now,
so dont sit around and waste you life away,
dont sit around and waste your life today,
you better get busy on achieven your goals,
believe in yourself yea believe in your soul,
start new and start now start leaven the old,

any thoughts please?
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby gutawafang » Sep 10th, '09, 20:19

Such a huge improvement man. That was dope, especially your verse. Your sister's good too. RX verse is not so unique.
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby D'Leh » Sep 10th, '09, 20:24

gutawafang wrote:Such a huge improvement man. That was dope, especially your verse. Your sister's good too. RX verse is not so unique.



Thanks Guta, this is my sister second verse and RX's first too, thats why, really thank you :y:
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby D'Leh » Sep 10th, '09, 20:38

anyone?? :whistle:
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby mcZu » Sep 10th, '09, 20:43

Your verse was the best. Overall it's not bad at all. Try focusing on improving your rhymeschemes, and try out some wordplay. Keep it up, just keep on writing.
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby D'Leh » Sep 10th, '09, 20:45

mcZu wrote:Your verse was the best. Overall it's not bad at all. Try focusing on improving your rhymeschemes, and try out some wordplay. Keep it up, just keep on writing.


thanks homie for real, thers one freestyle i made called The mask, it got some more wordplay and shit! :y:
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby D'Leh » Sep 10th, '09, 21:08

thanks man really!! :y:
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 10th, '09, 21:08

your verse was definately the best...the multis were great...i liked the pig line the best
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby Drama Setter » Sep 10th, '09, 21:12

nice drop bro , but I have a question , "my girl will never redress livin under my roof,"
a girl sings this part ,right? :unsure:
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Re: Patience (Bonus Track)

Postby classthe_king » Sep 10th, '09, 22:21

Your flow was the best i had ever seen from you. Good lyrics, keep steppin it up.
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