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You Aint Nothing

Postby D'Leh » Sep 12th, '09, 02:36

Ayo,aint no playa in the game has swagger like us/
And no shit in the area is wacker than yours/
Plus,you gotta trust me,its ugly to diss the crew/
So you gotta think about it,before youre gettin bruised/
Because you know you gonna lose,screw us is not a cruise/
Explicit Crew,still clockin,still knockin boots/
Packin loot,never mute,we are shootin regular/
Holla at us,game rulers,recognize the real ballers/
The thugs had a hope,but now its just fucked up/
We are fckin prisoners,cause the hood locked us up/
Droppin rhymes to demolish,killin that rap bullshit/
Can be your worst nightmare,then realize your wishes/
We preach the gold reachin,sweepin the competition/
Same dream,makin cream,playin the same position/
Right directive,electric vibes,its gettin hectic/
Time for you to testify,straight slick and sick shit/
Blindin like a lightnin,wavin the Mac 11/
frikin fuckin D'Leh,flyin till the heaven/

aby comments? i'll return! :whistle:
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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby D'Leh » Sep 12th, '09, 18:18

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:dope shit, flowed really well for me, and sum nice multies, well done :flower:



thanks scotty!!!! :y:
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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby gutawafang » Sep 12th, '09, 18:36

Not bad. Flow's good. Rhymes not that good. :)
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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby D'Leh » Sep 12th, '09, 18:36

gutawafang wrote:Not bad. Flow's good. Rhymes not that good. :)



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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby Solace » Sep 13th, '09, 16:44

gutawafang wrote:Not bad. Flow's good. Rhymes not that good. :)

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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 13th, '09, 20:14

it was a good drop , i liked ya internal rhymes ,, that's what makes it flow really ,,,,,, keep it up :y:
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Re: You Aint Nothing

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Sep 15th, '09, 16:19

pretty good! I like it! :y:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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