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Trapped In My Own Prison

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Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Solace » Sep 15th, '09, 02:59

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Sitting with my head down as I rethink every second,
Wishing I was dead now, it wouldn't matter, I reckon,
Recently I've lessened like God is teaching me a lesson,
My shoes on the dirt, exactly just what I feel less than,
Feeling threatened, but by what? It's this girl rapidly,
Attacking me, bashing these rackets into my sanity,
Blasphemy, bloody battered jeans, yeah that is me,
Cried too much, what the fuck is radically happening,
Pain actually captured me, I can't even think straight,
Maybe it's the others with all the hate that's been made,
Maybe it's the wonder of what could've been saved,
Cause after this it's like her face as been engraved,
Wish it were different, now instead I wish I never said it,
Should've let it go, but just no I had to defend it,
Maybe it's obsession, and honestly I don't regret it,
Maybe it's depression, nevertheless I try to forget it.

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Because I never mattered enough, mattered enough,
And now through it all, how could I even manage this stuff?
Now you see me through the fog all splattered in blood,
And all because I never motherfucking mattered enough.
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby classthe_king » Sep 15th, '09, 03:11

Wow, that was deep :'(

I loved it.
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 15th, '09, 03:13

That was some sick ass rhyming, :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Solace » Sep 15th, '09, 21:47

Thanks guys :y:
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Le Tunisien » Sep 16th, '09, 03:51

deep & sick :y:
that was dope :smoking: i liked it :worship:
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby lilrossy » Sep 16th, '09, 06:53

fuk yea man, this shit was sick. keep it up. :y:
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After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby gutawafang » Sep 16th, '09, 07:22

What a deep hook you got man. Nice multis.

Nice:
Maybe it's obsession, and honestly I don't regret it,
Maybe it's depression, nevertheless I try to forget it.

I totally loved it. :y:
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 21:52

Props on all the positive comments! :worship:
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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 17th, '09, 18:37

Yo Solace as usual dope man for real. Your flow is real easy for me to follow. Dope man just dope
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With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Trapped In My Own Prison

Postby Solace » Sep 17th, '09, 21:25

Thanks dude! :flower:
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