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Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 15th, '09, 09:41

The chorus and the intro and outro are included in the beat so I just wrote down what the girl on the beat said...enjoy


(Intro)Emotionless the city lies,
Cruel it is clouds my eyes,
The dark the dark shades of my day,
I live inside this place,

Verse 1
I'm emotionless, my eyelids pull down,
I can't escape death, my souls bound,
So if I run, I can never walk,
My tongues still, I can't ever talk,
So if I breathe, my lungs will expand,
And if I'm strangled, with a still hand,
Ill be emotionless
Ill be dead asleep, led to leap,
Only my mind has secrets, that my head will keep,
My world is only, were my two feet stand,
On this beach barefoot, with only the heat of the sand,
You greet my hand with a smile, when you really despise my face,
You want me gone, like my fuckin eyes were erased,


I see only, what I want to see,
I be only, what I want to be,
(Yea) I think I got this face


Verse 2
I see your lips of red, red like blood,
A face so pale, like its dead in the mud,
You were like a flower, bred to bud,
I'm standing on the floor, and the ceiling collapses,
I have been scared before, and the feeling relapses,
Talking to these people, is like talking to a brick wall,
I feel like I'm walkin a slope, ready to flip and wall,
Walkin this narrow path, yet I don't trip at all,
But its a slippery slope, and Im ready to slip and crawl,
I seem to lose control, even on cruise control,
I just want to fade into the shadows and disappear,
I can't bleed, my wristll smear,
I've kissed a tear, not only this year,
the years come and lost,
My warm heart got numb in frost,


I see only, what I want to see,
I be only, what I want to be,
(Yea) I think I got this face


Verse 3
I walk the beach, and see my footprints in the sand,
Painted my tracks, I need to rinse my hand,
I don't know what my future holds, I need past tense to expand,
I lay in a bed, knowing nightmares come near,
I shiver with the cold air, but don't feel it I'm numb in fear,
I would be surprised, if I didn't cry one tear,
And ill be emotionless,


I see only, what I want to see,
I be only, what I want to be,
(Yea) I think I got this face

(Outro)Emotionless the city lies,
Cruel it is clouds my eyes,
The dark the dark shades of my day,
I live inside this place,
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 15th, '09, 11:32

I love it man. Your serious songs are sick these days grif. I dig this song cause it's more raw than complex and it works ya know. "Ill be dead asleep, led to leap,
Only my mind has secrets, that my head will keep"
Sick line bro. Keep workin man
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 15th, '09, 16:42

Thanks Jus
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 15th, '09, 18:34

Hahahahaha yeah we play football together :P
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 15th, '09, 19:49

thanks Scott
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 16th, '09, 07:52

Yah-hah wrote:I love it man. Your serious songs are sick these days grif. I dig this song cause it's more raw than complex and it works ya know. "Ill be dead asleep, led to leap,
Only my mind has secrets, that my head will keep"
Sick line bro. Keep workin man

Lol Jus I read this and think was my first song really called "Blow Me"
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby gutawafang » Sep 16th, '09, 09:12

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:lol you two know each other i'm guessing? anyway, great piece :y: a good read.

I knew that long ago. :p Cuz they feed each other like there's no tomorrow. :D

Anyways, the tiltle is inspiring.

And the chorus is fucking poetic, it's a compliment.

I'll breakdown after reading it again man. :flower:

AWESOME. :worship:

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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 16th, '09, 10:36

nice content ,, flowed well , i liked the chorus ,,, and the emotion in the piece ,, interesting ,,,,,, :y:
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 16th, '09, 14:04

Thanks gutaw...I wish I would have thought of the chorus...but it was on the beat I used but thanks
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 16th, '09, 14:12

Hahahahaha dude blow me was epic :P
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 16th, '09, 16:22

Thanks to you too Zaddy
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 16th, '09, 16:41

Thanks Amadeo
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Solace » Sep 20th, '09, 03:16

Real good piece man, and sorry for not feeding your stuff ever lol. I've heard this beat way too many times so I knew how it went and it sounded pretty good in my head.
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 21st, '09, 05:31

lol foreal youve heard this beat...i just got it on Shadowville
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Re: Fa-Q - Emotionless

Postby Solace » Sep 21st, '09, 22:31

Yeah man MC Anonymous and Tom Chambers have used it before lol.

I'm pretty sure it is at least, its got that girlish edited voice singing the hook right.
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