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Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

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Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 21:58

[Verse 1: Solace]
I'm true, fuck no I ain't no racist, no making fun of slaveships,
That's weak, and honestly I know what pain is, wish I could erase it,
I take this constant hating and spit it back so now I'm feeling weightless,
Back at faggots like you, just an example of what a waste of space is,
I'm a little Rakim in training, it seems that my talent, you crave it,
To get up onto my level, you gotta somehow sneak your way in,
Just fucking name it, I've won every "e-beef" that I've played in,
If this were weed smoking contest I'd be the only one blazing,
Pretending your famous, as if ya lame hits have been on a playlist,
Just a gay bitch writing the same shit. Just wondering, ain't it,
A bitch when ya outwitted by a kid, sir I can guess you hate it,
Face it, you ain't sick, you're simply basic when you say you lace it,
Jeez, my first piece I ever wrote is obviously better than your latest,
Amazin', you're the best...Oh wait yeah, best at being the fakest,
I'll rip out your fucking eyes, then I'll sew them to your anus,
So I can show you the shit your wackass drops on a regular basis.

[Chorus: Solace]
Love rapping and bashing massive fractions while laughing,
Our actions have massive passion, while most others lack it,
Drastic yet fantastic, a simple yet lyrical spastic asskick,
Fuck suicide,we already mastered The Art of Dying like Cashis.

[Verse 2: AliJack]
I'm continuously prevailing. your rap shit? keep it on the low
you're trailing, behind, flailing, while I'm leading every row,
section and column, your faces look solemn,
you just wack I'm right on top of rap, you still at the bottom,
I flow like clear rivers, Down ya spine i send you chills and shivers,
I'm invincible, I'm just convinced you've never met the illest
from the D X B, I'm an eMC,
fuck a square, i bet I'm fresher than the prince of Bel Air
I'd rather take a crap while I'm skinny dippin',
than listen to your wack rap, you're shittier than ass crack,
I sense a bad verse approachin' with all 5 of my senses
I play offensive, while your starin', then fuck up your lenses
I'm a dope fiend, Smoke the mic with vengeance, and then some
then son, I eat up competition like dim sum
By the time I'm done pickin' a rapper out of my teeth
I'm approached by the next vegan trynna test the chef's Beef

[Chorus: Solace]
Love rapping and bashing massive fractions while laughing,
Our actions have massive passion, while most others lack it,
Drastic yet fantastic, a simple yet lyrical spastic asskick,
Fuck suicide, we already mastered The Art of Dying like Cashis.
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 22:14

How comes you always come into my topics just to spam. :zipped:
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 22:15

I count that as spam, since you didnt give feedback at all.
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 22:17

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:
Solace wrote:I count that as spam, since you didnt give feedback at all.


i did actually, if you re-read it, i said your bars are too long, which makes it hard for me to flow to your verse. alijacks was not bad though.

Why dont you just go and say it then.

don't write that shit verse, solace, you'll find that
your bars are too long, so how can we vibe that .. ?

oh and i dont count that as feed either
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 22:22

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:'cause i was bored (you are telling us not to test you, bit cocky) so it inspired me to write a verse back at you, which i thought was pretty good actually considering it was just a key-style.

Bit cocky? What do you expect me to write about how good I am but have a title "I'm Not That Good". Just if you wouldnt mind giving me real feedback than keystyling an entire verse with only 2 lines giving me the clue my lines were too long and nothing to AliJack I'd appreciate it.
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby AliJack » Sep 16th, '09, 22:24

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:
Solace wrote:I count that as spam, since you didnt give feedback at all.


i did actually, if you re-read it, i said your bars are too long, which makes it hard for me to flow to your verse. alijacks was not bad though.

Seriously?! :o
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby AliJack » Sep 16th, '09, 22:36

Atleast it didn't suck ass. I hope one day i'll look back and be able to laugh at this shit and not have to wish I didn't fall off. FROM THIS. :unsure:
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 16th, '09, 22:39

Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 22:41

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:ok calm down i was only having a bit of fun.

anyway, here's your feed. i didn't like it that much 'cause the bars were too long which makes it harder for me to find the flow, but maybe that's just me, other people might have no problem flowing it. but in terms of rhymes etc, it was good, esp how you kept the same rhyme throughout the whole piece, even though those rhyming words have been done to death, i know that 'cause i've used them loads. as for alijack, your verse was easier to flow, but you didn't have the complexity that solace had. but over all it was an okay piece, but not really my type. hook was a bit complicated for a hook, would've thought that would suit a place in a verse rather than a hook. 6/10

I was being a jackass before, sorry, I don't know why but I felt kinda pissed lol.

Major props for the feed :worship:

Emadyville wrote:Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:

Thank you for giving in depth feed as well :worship:
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby AliJack » Sep 16th, '09, 23:11

Emadyville wrote:Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:

What.
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Solace » Sep 16th, '09, 23:21

THE ALIJACK HAHAHAHAHHHAAA
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Emadyville » Sep 16th, '09, 23:39

AliJack wrote:
Emadyville wrote:Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:

What.


Haha my bad I must have been starting the sentence differently in my head then I was typing it, sorry about that there was no disrespect there
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby AliJack » Sep 16th, '09, 23:41

Emadyville wrote:
AliJack wrote:
Emadyville wrote:Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:

What.


Haha my bad I must have been starting the sentence differently in my head then I was typing it, sorry about that there was no disrespect there

lmfao i was just fuckin around man, i know.
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Spyder » Sep 17th, '09, 00:04

i recognize that hook :shifty:
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Re: Don't Even Test Us (Feat. AliJack)

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 17th, '09, 01:05

AliJack wrote:
Emadyville wrote:Solace your verse was nice, i like how you kept the rhyme scheme the same throughout, whether they been used a lot like scotty said doesnt matter in my eyes, you still had to put substance to the verse and you did that, it was hard to find the flow tho. Hook was complex but I liked the rhymes and what was said EXCEPT the cashis line, i don't think a hook is somewhere to use a metaphor about another artist, just me tho. The Alijack had a decent verse but it wasn't on your level, overall the whole thing was enjoyable :y:

What.


Fuck the world, don't ask me for shit/
And everything you get you gotta work hard for it/
Honeys shake your hips, ya don't stopppp/
And ni(g)(g)az pack the clips, keep onnnnn, bitch!/

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Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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