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The Things You Do

Postby Solace » Sep 19th, '09, 04:28

[Chorus]
Never picked anything over you or above you,
Now I wish I was over you, but I still love you,
When I'm next to nothing, which would you choose?
Explain, me or the pain, which would you lose?

[Verse]
It's like I'm your shadow, I don't feel noticed, so hopeless,
The cold shoulder, you're unimpressed with what I'm showing,
I wrote three pieces last week, and another 2 days ago,
Another yesterday, just I wonder how many days I'll go,
Thinking about you, cause trying to forget didn't work,
And I'll say it out loud cause I don't need a written word,
I guess it didn't hurt, for you to say goodbye to me,
Well it was completely flipped for me as far as I could see,
How fine my life would be with sights of the girl I would need,
By my side indeed to fight with me against rivalries,
I'm that price she ain't buying see, how hard could lying be?
I'll pretend it don't affect me whenever she's denying me,
Trying to be the guy she sees in her eye whenever they closed,
Neglect, depressed, obsessed, when in the heat I stay cold,
Stopping myself from crying, haunting myself at night,
Hiding the pain is all I can do after wanting myself to die.

[Chorus]
Never picked anything over you or above you,
Now I wish I was over you, but I still love you,
When I'm next to nothing, which would you choose?
Explain, me or the pain, which would you lose?
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby *MIRANDA* » Sep 19th, '09, 04:50

very beautiful, i felt it :flower:
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby Solace » Sep 19th, '09, 05:06

:worship: Happy you two enjoyed it
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby Le Tunisien » Sep 19th, '09, 05:26

love it :y:
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby Wallace » Sep 19th, '09, 15:15

You killed it :p
Yes, it was very nice. :smoking:
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby Solace » Sep 19th, '09, 15:17

Thanks Wallace and Tunisien :happy:
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby DƎRDYPK » Sep 19th, '09, 15:36

that was dope!
hook kinda reminded me of something Deuce from Hollywood Undead would do :smoking:
Your verse was dope too. had a nice flow & i love how you put bars together like
Solace wrote:Well it was completely flipped for me as far as I could see,
How fine my life would be with sights of the girl I would need,
By my side indeed to fight with me against rivalries,
I'm that price she ain't buying see, how hard could lying be?
I'll pretend it don't affect me whenever she's denying me,

I can relate man :y: this piece was dope :worship: keep dropping bombs
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby classthe_king » Sep 19th, '09, 18:56

This was dope. I couldn't find any favorite lines because this whole part was awesome.

And I'll say it out loud cause I don't need a written word,
I guess it didn't hurt, for you to say goodbye to me,
Well it was completely flipped for me as far as I could see,
How fine my life would be with sights of the girl I would need,
By my side indeed to fight with me against rivalries,
I'm that price she ain't buying see, how hard could lying be?
I'll pretend it don't affect me whenever she's denying me,

Brought your A game on this.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: The Things You Do

Postby Solace » Sep 20th, '09, 02:47

Thank you guys, really glad you think it's good! :y:
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