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NEW Steve Spag - So The Story Goes

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 20th, '09, 19:51

Havn't dropped much here lately, but I just wrote this piece yesterday and I feel like sharing, lol. I normally would at least let you peek the beat, but I think I may end up recording this 'cause I just finished a nice 2nd verse and hook. Anyways, not really much to say other than I hope you get the flow, and please leave some feedback!

nobody knows where i go
my friends all suppose that i just sit all alone
but i don't, i'm out on the streets
rain, sleet, sunshine, or snow have no effect's on me
i've been in blistering cold
i've been in the heat for way too long now and it still ain't show
i can take some more
'cause i'm white as fuck and i know that i could use a few coats
yeah i've got some foes
and a couple hoes hate me still but this news is old
and so the story goes
i will get revenge on them all and i'll make them know that
i ain't your average joe
through the practice back in my past came my talent yo
and this sack of dro helps keep my brain soo intact
it raps on it's own

Copywright: Steve Spag 2009

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Re: NEW Steve Spag - So The Story Goes

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 20th, '09, 22:15

Short line Long line. :flower:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: NEW Steve Spag - So The Story Goes

Postby Solace » Sep 20th, '09, 23:08

Nice piece Steve. I understood the short line, long line structure because it flowed perfect with the internal rhymes. Wasn't too complex, it was the sorta theme I'd expect from you. Pretty good, would like to hear this in audio :y:

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Re: NEW Steve Spag - So The Story Goes

Postby Arabian Shady » Sep 21st, '09, 09:15

that was good man, diggin the structure, flow was tight as well
let us know what it sounds like :y:
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