Drowning In Sorrow *(EDITED - Verse 2 Added)*

[lilrossy]

verse one:
at the beach, fold out seat, blue heeler at my feet,
headphones with a beat, pen and pad to speak,
bout me troubles in me life, but its not all about me,
not all peoples lifes are bright, plenty struggling fish in the sea,
but lately i couldnt give a damn, im just tryna stand,
pain finds me, and i just soak it up like water in the sand,
god must hate me, the way he crams problems into life,
can i cope with the strain? shit mane, not by a blame sight,
i try to fight but i end up on the floor, i can't take it anymore,
the pain just smashes me like crashing waves on the shore,
im at war with myself, eating my own heart out,
people expecting me to excell, but i find it hard now,
im down and out, struggling, finding it hard to breathe,
just wanna fly away with the wind, blowing in the trees,
outside in the breeze i pray to be at ease tomorrow,
tryna swim in the seas of depression, im drowning in sorrow.

verse two:
im tryna swim to shore, like ripples rolling in the water,
but there sumthing stopping me, like those customs at the border,
feel outa order, my lifes jus slaughtered with broken dreams,
silent screams, im sinking in sorrow, like submarines,
been robbed for my means, worthless, all i got is my breath,
tell me lifes not mean, when all thats promised is death,
feel like our only purpose in life, is just tryin to survive,
so it seems, we jus live our life, try and succeed, and then die,
and i got these motherfuckers at my door tellin me to believe,
believe that theres more, pick up a bible and read,
im like, read these rhymes, and each line feel my pain,
sorry, but jesus slained aint done fuckin shit for me mane,
i say his name in vain, cuz in this world were all alone,
if u want sumthin for yourself, you gotta get it on ya own,
my faiths been thrown away, and my heart is hollow,
tryna get thru the day and just breathe, im drowning in sorrow.

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good metaphores and comparisions...dope drop...I'd like to see a full song

[lilrossy]

thanx alot man. im writting a it as a full song, jus finished the first verse so i thought i'd post it to see wat ppl think. cheers for the feedback, appreciate it.

[Boston]

i like the drop, good shit bro..seems to me your still somewhat new to me at this but isnt bad at all

by any chance is this to the drowning in sorrow sinima beat?

[lilrossy]

yes it is to that sinima beat, jus found it the other day and i jus had to write sum shit to it. thanx for reading and giving sum feedbak man.

[Boston]

ahaa i asked cuz i just started writing to that beat to.. guna record to it probably

i know im feeling pain, i just cant describe it right/
silent nights, seein you when i close my eyes at night/
crying like, my advice, was just to get high and write/
comply with knifes, dyin why, i just cant confine with life/
behind the mic, facing fears, im just not the hiding type/
its gettin dark the end is near and i can see the blinding light/
rewind the time, before the cancer, fore' you had the pride to fight/
ignore the answer, form as nana, let me see your smiling side/

thats what i have to that beat anyways so far

[lilrossy]

haha, dats kewl.

wat u got so far is pretty dope man, b sure to post it when ur finished, cant wait to read it.