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Emotionally Drained.

Postby MC Anonymous » Sep 22nd, '09, 00:06

Pathways of heaven, the rap ways to hell
going for sevens, the gat says oh well
They don't even care, they'd rather be deaf
So you see me bleeding there, with some bullets on my chest
I'm depressed and a wreck, nobody notices that
they rather go and spit wack, rumors about me, my cap
will detatch, from retraction of a gat, that's that
reactions is wack, people rather see me fade to black
I've cried countless times, tears drops on the lines
of my paper, and it stains, the reflection of the times
Suicide, homicide, neglegence of the mind
I said all this cause I'm blind, God give a sign
my bod-y is in slime, please help my life
stealth my knife, give me a healthy wife
I don't wanna be alone anymore, in a zone
where my bones can be torn, by evil spawn that's born

Have you ever felt hated, friendships disintergrated
cinders came with morbid animosity, got to be desegnated
to the driver of this life, in my socks and my shoes
If I drop, yall will rule, that's not gonna happen fool
but you make it so hard, so so hard
for me to get my pen and pad, and flow those bars
I go so far, to end up, broken with ten cuts
fed up, and fed X, faster then boxing, what?
I got the cuts, my spirit bleeds, my body is drained
are you all really happy that you got me insane?
Stupid little fools, don't you see what you've done
You've created a monster, can't be stopped with a gun
Cause' as long as I write, I will be eternity
all you other haters of my life will eventually turn to me
now it's your turn to be, where your morals or ethics
if you can't find it, don't sweat it, when you get split
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby classthe_king » Sep 22nd, '09, 00:38

You always come hard. (Pause) Again your flow is awesome, are you recording it?
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby Xray » Sep 22nd, '09, 01:42

Damn man I can tell the lyrical style changed. Before you had lines that ended up too short where it felt like it was a snippet of a line then another snippet would come (next line). But this was different, each line explained itself well, and it delivered a dope message man. I felt what you were saying, and the flow was seriously really good. Improvement's looking great homie, keep it up. :b:
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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby gutawafang » Sep 22nd, '09, 03:16

Dope. Especially this part:
I've cried countless times, tears drops on the lines
of my paper, and it stains, the reflection of the times.

Seriously, it almost made me tear. It's too emotional.
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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby daddycoco23 » Sep 24th, '09, 03:39

dope :worship:
All you people say im wack?
Y'all can suck on my ball sack- Daddycoco (Me)


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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby Arabian Shady » Sep 24th, '09, 20:30

Xray wrote:Damn man I can tell the lyrical style changed. Before you had lines that ended up too short where it felt like it was a snippet of a line then another snippet would come (next line). But this was different, each line explained itself well, and it delivered a dope message man. I felt what you were saying, and the flow was seriously really good. Improvement's looking great homie, keep it up. :b:



yea i agrreee with that homie, no doubt the concepts are dop encouraging the reader to read on, that was exellent :y:
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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby daddycoco23 » Sep 24th, '09, 20:33

classic
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Y'all can suck on my ball sack- Daddycoco (Me)


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Re: Emotionally Drained.

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 24th, '09, 21:04

:y: :y:
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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