Only Person There..

[MC Anonymous]

I know what it's like to be the only person there
and your trying to be pure as a lonely virgin scared
People redicule and tease, cause' they don't know who you are
when they see you in the halls, they just wanna use your arms
so you push your buttons, be abused, but there's something
inside you, when there's nothing, inside them, so you wonder
How will life progress, when the rest are so stressed
and their chests filled with breath, is polluted in a sense?
They abuse you with comtempt, but you spit and you wonder
what is it that you did, should you sit, in your slumber
and just sleep, maybe inside your sleep you could weep
without society's leak of ignorance, now who would keep
these little souls filled with hate, got another kill to take
and my tears filled a lake, it's a never ending stake
bending fate in my chest, and my heart pumps ice
this world is a game, can't start my life

Wickedness within rips skin, are you sick of it?
it's a sick sin but you happy with certificates
you abuse me, all I do is spark the pen
starts to bend every letter till my heart will end
Come and see the light, run to me despite
people running my name in a bed of spikes
The lead is like, a fate that is worse the death
everytime you slander my name it burns my breath
Cause I'm innocent, your words burning inside
commit suicide, and of course the jury will slide
I was mentally incompetent, I was just confused
and they must refuse, that maybe I was abused
by you, and him, and her, and people
same people claims to pray on steaples
spill my heart to two girls
my mind and the paper, escape from this cruel world

[neversnooze]

aside from your expert vocabulary type lyrics, this was less wordy but i enjoyed reading it. the flow ,rhyme scheme, was on point and i understood the meaning of this piece.Great!

good job 9/10

[Requiem]

wow, i'm startin to like this new structure.... tho i miss the old anon style. this was a really nice piece. an emotional punch on some of those lines.

now who would keep
these little souls filled with hate, got another kill to take

I think the flow kinda slipped a little with the line jump there. but really good nonetheless

[gutawafang]

bending fate in my chest, and my heart pumps ice

I know what it's like to be the only person there
and your trying to be pure as a lonely virgin scared

Totally loved the direct meaning in this man.

[eminemgirl1234]

I totally like it. It's really good. Keep it up! Make some more!