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Multies practice...

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 23rd, '09, 05:10

Wielding liquid-swords and unveiling the sickest-chords, rippin'-your nerves open with killing blades/
Fitted-or pitted-for a frigid-war, empirically assassinate while lyrically fascinate, no need for chlling hate/
I gotta test the weapon's-mettle, get it? Test the weapon's-metal; I ain't got to set-it-gentle/
Sippin'-kettles of fiery-metaphors, my priority's-to-rid-of-for...gers; if my mic burns, let-it-settle/
Cold-rhymes destroy-n'-blind your old-minds; I unfold-lines of a murderer and I am a true-asserter/
Behold-fine ability like gold-shines of nobility as I hold-my utility of rap: the lyrical topping of mousse-desert/
To slaughter-the-enemies, I father-the-penning and master-and-play-most-mics like Saturday-show-fights/
Observant like a Morman, always come equipped-with-warfare sittin'-with-four-pairs of sold-knives/

Feedback please. :confusion: The whole verse was basically to see how many multies I could utilize in 4 bars while making SOME sense.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Multies practice...

Postby RapName » Sep 23rd, '09, 09:07

:n:
strikeboy wrote:Hey Alaine. I like young girls obviously and I don't get the oppurtunity to talk to them at all in fact. Well, I don't care really what you're like on the inside and I just really want you to come to bed with me. Would you do that if you could? Even if you were just average on the outside (but not fat) I could like you if you sounded smart.

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GoodGirlsGetGutted wrote:Em is average at best without The Eminem Show.
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Re: Multies practice...

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 23rd, '09, 22:19

Yeah I mean some of them seem kinda forced and off at times. Keep it up though man just get yo practice in and you'll be straight :P stay up homie
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Multies practice...

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 25th, '09, 19:53

krayzy wrote:i wish we had like a rep system like the old shady forum i used to go to..i'd make you muthafuckers whom i give feedback to rep me so much for the nice long feedback i give =P

ah who am i kiddin im just talkitive and i cant not just give good feedback :flower:

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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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