Rough Up-Bringing (Short Rap)

by **daddycoco23** » Sep 24th, '09, 00:18

My life as a kid, this kid at college literally helped my write this he started me with first 2 lines and i just freestyled the rest, how you guys think? 1 to 10 please and feedback thanks, solace what you think of this?

In this toxic broken home there's tons of negative emotion /
The dramatics get exposed when all the tension's left unspoken /
With mom and dad at each other's throats, some small accessories get broken /
Tense commotion, sad emotions, the molten lava's just explodin' /
You know my dad just gets annoyin' 'cause he's always damn controllin' /
In the afternoon or mornin' he just yaps---this matter's sordid! /
He just has the yakkin' goin' in the bathroom and the toilet /
He is bored and unemployed, I hear the anger that he's voicin' /
It doesn't matter at this point if he is mad or unemployed /
'Cause I am mad and unemployed but I don't have the yakkin' goin'/
I won't attack when not provoked, with all the tensions I'm avoidin' /
But I attack when I'm provoked, so folks don't get the facts distorted /
With tempers boilin' at this home there's always chatter of divorcin' /
I want to exit from this home, but fucking rents I can't afford them /
I'm unemployed and I'm annoyed at all the trash that I'm absorbin' /
I cannot stand my father's BULLSHIT, at any moment I'm EXPLODIN' /