"Dream" (unfinished)

[FAME]

I’m beginning to start to think
That I’m at the very brink
I’m still in sync, but starting to head downhill
I know I have a colossal amount of skill
In this gape in my hole that I need to fill
People telling me to chill, but I can’t calm down
My smile is turning into a frown
As the world turns I’m starting to look like a clown
Still stuck in this fucked up town, I gotta get out
My dream is just something I can’t live without
I know I can accomplish it beyond any doubt
I just want everyone to shout, my name
Fame, I’m tried of waiting here
I don’t just want to disappear
My mind is telling me that is should just persevere
How will school help me achieve my career
I want to be a pioneer, for people to take me serious
One thing people call me when they hear it, delirious
Its so mysterious, that I would want to be
Inside of the wrestling ring
I can only take these verbal abuses to a tolerable degree
I try to agree, but that’s not what I need
I want to prove that I can succeed
Even if I have to bleed
I’m not in the business for the greed
So I must proceed, to achieve my dream

I still need work, but something I just did in 15 minutes. A personal thought of my dream, though I kind of want to do more with this and turn it into a verse. Cut out a few things too.

[bullet_boy46]

I’m still in sync, but starting to head downhill
I know I have a colossal amount of skill
In this gape in my hole that I need to fill

love that line/ overall great job

also check mind out its called dead, i need some feedback thanks

[DƎRDYPK]

that was deep
I like your MCMG avatar by the way

[FAME]

I’m still in sync, but starting to head downhill
I know I have a colossal amount of skill
In this gape in my hole that I need to fill

love that line/ overall great job

also check mind out its called dead, i need some feedback thanks

Thanks for the positive feedback! I feedbacked you too.

that was deep
I like your MCMG avatar by the way

Thanks bro. Oh yeah Machine Guns rule all

[lilrossy]

the rhyming was off at some points, which makes it hard to read, but besides that, it was pretty good hey. think u got sum good skill, jus need ta practice. btw good work.

[gutawafang]

The vocabulary you used made it beautiful. Flow is there I think.

Dope: I can only take these verbal abuses to a tolerable degree

It's really simple and direct I must say. But it's really beautiful.

Keep it up.