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Throw A Way 16

Postby Solace » Oct 1st, '09, 22:19

Found this before I was gunna write a little 16 lines and post but i decided to post this anyways

Competitors ain't even spitting dude, in the end they rip in two,
I'm happy for you and I'ma let you finish right after I finish you,
I'm murking, hurting and lurking, when the bullet bursts hit,
The way I treat bitches makes it look like Chris Brown was flirtin',
You're worthless, I'm priceless, nicest even spitting light shit,
Ya girl getting around while you stay working the night shift,
My wise wit when I write shit is money and ya still in debt,
A french girl say your dick is a little "Yes", did you get it yet?
Neverless never forget the forever best 'cause they never rest,
They'll keep writing and striking like lightning and it never ends,
Experience this first hand even when I put out my worst hand,
You're amazed, because forever it's better than yours man,
I'll shred you at the first glance, fuck your lightweight ether,
Let's shout out "Fuck Solace!", man I don't like me neither,
And before I end this piece, I'll let you know that I'll never sleep,
Til my dreams succeed, well how hard could my endeavors be?
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby mcZu » Oct 1st, '09, 22:58

Flow was dope, started off sloppy though. Work a bit on you transitions, besides that you got it pretty much on lock.
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby Solace » Oct 2nd, '09, 00:23

Good looks on feed :y:
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby Emadyville » Oct 2nd, '09, 00:23

I thought that was pretty good piece man, not your best, but def solid, the chris brown line was tight i loved that line :y: :y:
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby Solace » Oct 2nd, '09, 00:25

Thanks dude :y:
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 2nd, '09, 20:17

Yeah man solid drop homie nice little 16 :p
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Re: Throw A Way 16

Postby Solace » Oct 3rd, '09, 18:58

Thanks! Appreciate it.
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