NEW Steve Spag Verse (Must Read)

[Steve Spag]

Alright, I just finished this piece up earlier today. Started it late last night while listening to this amazing beat that was on my 360. Probably gonna record this sometime soon, but I thought I'd share this first verse with you for now anyways. As always any and all feedback is appreciated!

i ain't ever been a hard guy
and i ain't ever bust no shots while i was out on a car drive
i've never seen any sparks fly
never grew up on the dark side, i'm not aparthied
but i'm chillin' at the barside
got some women with some large thighs, and they're part white
and they know that i'm alright
although i'm bitter like a salt mine, i am soo wise
i'm on the move like my hard drive
thing's gotta run smooth when you wanna live a star's life
even though it's a far ride
i won't ever be removed, i'll leave my mark like a shark bite
yeah you know i'm a smart guy
when i'm writtin' all these bars i got passion like my heart size
while you're stuck at the start line
i'm already done the race, it's obvious that you're dart shy

Coprwright: Steve Spag 2009

Leave Feedback Please!

[classthe_king]

Haha that was dope, i could catch up on the flow easily. I liked you keeping up the same rhyme the entire time.

[B.A.D.]

I have a similar flow on a track of my upcoming album

but you need to fix some lines, cuz some of them have 1 or 2 extra words that make the flow unperfect
and some are missing one word or 2 [lol] to make it more smooth

the idea is good, I love to rhyme like that too

hahaha, nice one

[Steve Spag]

Thanks for the feed guys, much appreciated!

[gutawafang]

loved the flow to it homie. and it's a plus for vocab man. nice.

[Brandon S]

Sounds dope, can't wait for u to post the audio

[Yah-hah]

Yo man it was a nice chilled verse. Kind of a relaxed flow man I dug it. Rhyme scheme was cool man just felt it ya know. Keep it up man

[Solace]

Smooth verse dude, but if you're ever looking to improve I'd work on something else other than multies like wordplay. But on this the multies and flow was smooth and I enjoyed it a lot

[Steve Spag]

Much thanks guys, glad you are diggin' the new piece!