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Down in the Trenches

Postby classthe_king » Oct 5th, '09, 02:50

I don't know if i like this :unsure: It would help alot if you could leave feed on whether you liked it and how to make it better, so i can see if i should record it or not.

Why do we have to go on wit this conflict
Everybody thinkin they so dag gon sick
They like convicts, surrounded by so many bars
They’ll never escape the pain creates so many scars
Unload then we charge wit the guns n the missiles
Im like cagin animals so have fun wit the riddles
The tundra will cripple and now you lookin like a pc
Collapsing like bizarre’s flow rapping over three beats
Relieve the misery that exists for me till you hard-ly speak
The slice from the music will make all your arteries leak
Till you’re starting to bleed now rappers can’t handle tragedy
Or the blood stained fists that came wit the name attached to me
Scratch the beat, cause im bout to go down in the trenches
And you better never ever fuck around shits relentless
Like a tiger writer cause I always pounce on the victims
You couldn’t fuck wit even just an ounce of the sick ones
That Schwarzenegger shit, im always down wit the big guns
And when you arrive you should never bounce till you get some
When you arrive you should never bounce till you get some
And when you arrive you should never bounce till you get some

(Chorus) x2
Cause it seems like every time I hop on a track
It’s like warfare shots bein fired right back
Down in the trenches fightin off every attack
Wit my bro’s on my side and my foes getting cracked

Thinking you might as well battle me, you ain’t got nothin to lose
Well if you fuck wit me your face will be stuck in the news
Im thuggin on you, leave your ass struck n’ confused
And fuckin abused like Rihanna when she was busted n’ bruised
Ive got somethin to prove to everyone, im so anxious
I’ll blow the scope off the rifle and spit venom through the blank clips
I’ll take this game by storm, Ive already came and warned
That my reign will swarm and leave your body slain n torn
Ill blaze a course that will put me on the right path
To strike back and provide wrath whenever you rhyme wack
If you don’t like that then ill come flyin at you like a crazy hawk
Cause ive got a little hidden surprise like miss baby talk
It’s the way we walk cause im about to go down in the trenches
And you better never ever fuck around shits relentless
I’ve got a thirst for power and I am about to quench this
Then have you runnin like a high kid bouncin fences
The king of rap ive got a crown to represent this
Now im swinging on you pussies like a bout wit clench fists
Swinging on you pussies hard like a bout clench fists
Now im swinging on you pussies hard like a bout wit clench fists

(Chorus) x2
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Re: Down in the Trenches

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 5th, '09, 02:54

wow....i like the rhyme scheme with the a/a/ and middle of next line than another rhyme pattern.....dope...you gonna add a third verse
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Re: Down in the Trenches

Postby classthe_king » Oct 5th, '09, 02:58

haha thanks, maybe, if i get some good feed on it :shifty:
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Re: Down in the Trenches

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 5th, '09, 14:35

Yo I dug it man. Solid ryhmes throughout. Think it would help if you kinda expanded your word usage and stuff you'll be straight. Keep it up though homie :b:
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
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Re: Down in the Trenches

Postby classthe_king » Oct 5th, '09, 22:52

Yah-hah wrote:Yo I dug it man. Solid ryhmes throughout. Think it would help if you kinda expanded your word usage and stuff you'll be straight. Keep it up though homie :b:


Thanks :worship: Ill keep that in mind ;)
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Re: Down in the Trenches

Postby classthe_king » Oct 6th, '09, 03:13

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