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Postby Yah-hah » Oct 5th, '09, 23:54

What is structure?
Isn't that making all my dumb words fit together huh sir?
It's sentenced better brother, it makes your insane multis readable,
Same syllable sentences supposedly suffocate suckers (un)speakable,
So what do I say to these dumb suckers,
FUCK STRUCTURE
It's just some fun word some dumb nerd came up with to make his cum work,
Structure is for suckers 20 second lap dance lovers,
Stupid motherfuckers dumb words make my nuts hurt,
And wats worse is even if this was structured,
I'd just cram multis and cuss words down your throat so you won't breathe cause your lungs hurt,
Must be cause your tongue works from the time that that one kurd punctured your lungs worse,
I'm under your front nerve till I smash it on the front curb
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby TiBon » Oct 6th, '09, 00:14

...I'm with you ;)
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Spyder » Oct 6th, '09, 00:19

the structure was bad :sweating:
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Solace » Oct 6th, '09, 01:20

It's just some fun word some dumb nerd came up with to make his cum work,


Lmfao whut?
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 6th, '09, 01:25

Yah-hah wrote:What is structure?
Isn't that making all my dumb words fit together huh sir?
It's sentenced better brother, it makes your insane multis readable,
Same syllable sentences supposedly suffocate suckers (un)speakable,
So what do I say to these dumb suckers,
FUCK STRUCTURE
It's just some fun word some dumb nerd came up with to make his cum work,
Structure is for suckers 20 second lap dance lovers,
Stupid motherfuckers dumb words make my nuts hurt,
And wats worse is even if this was structured,
I'd just cram multis and cuss words down your throat so you won't breathe cause your lungs hurt,
Must be cause your tongue works from the time that that one kurd punctured your lungs worse,
I'm under your front nerve till I smash it on the front curb


Um, it actually had decent flow and SOME decent multies. But the subject is bullshit, sorry. Structure needs to be consistent somewhat to make it easy to flow. You're just lucky the flow was okay or lucky that I am very flexible while rapping verses with the words to flow.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 6th, '09, 02:45

FS...lol wow Just you sounded angry as fuck...this would be a mean audio...I thought it was dope foreal...this would be a cool song if it had no chorus...just 80 bars of madeness
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Solace » Oct 6th, '09, 02:47

Fa-Q wrote:FS...lol wow Just you sounded angry as fuck...this would be a mean audio...I thought it was dope foreal...this would be a cool song if it had no chorus...just 80 bars of madeness

And if it made sense.
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby JMG » Oct 6th, '09, 03:55

I feel ya man, dont let structure get in the way you write.
JMG wrote: so are you gonna come fight me or not

Menzo wrote:No, I HAVE something to live for.
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby B.A.D. » Oct 6th, '09, 04:41

structure is only necesary if you are going to put it on audio

otherwise, who cares??

text alone is bullshit anyways :n: there's no flow, no emotion, no nothing.. just text :tounge2:
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either way... for having a fucked up structure, this was real real good, and very enjoyable

big props on that :y:
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby neversnooze » Oct 6th, '09, 06:18

since this is about f*** structure, i wont comment on it. it was wierd, but it does have flow.
it was alright 6/10
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Re: FUCK STRUCTURE

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 6th, '09, 18:23

Hahahahahaah man why so serious :P dang I was just getting pissed everyone kept complaining my stuff had bad structure so I was just making fun of it geez. Word up to Fa-Q, Big Ax-D, and JMG. Everyone else :whistle: hahahaha just playing. My flow has a different feel to it like I would rap faster than most anyway and I spped up and slow down the flow often so my structure in texting it is off. Just one of those things I kinda keystyled lookin back on my past comments. Appreciate it though to all the homies for the feed :smoking:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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