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More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Solace » Oct 6th, '09, 23:33

Quickly wrote this.

So dude you can't get a girl, you got all byes and no hellos,
So how you gunna get by with more byes than bisexuals,
My "dope lines", they're so fine they're the purest of coke lines,
You get no showtime because most of ya rhymes DON'T rhyme,
Now how you gunna get up in bitches when the bitch is in you,
Come a second time at me and find that ya stitches is loose,
Even those some pussys stay in the fight, he's bailing out,
Just a bitch looking for "hot males" like an email account,
It's "Dinner Time" but I'm still chewing down my lunch meat,
Ain't got "Street Hop", so how the fuck you gunna "jump" me?
"Ya" worse than "ma hiney" so just try me when I'm rhyming,
Ain't in the "Class" 'cause I'm "the King" when it comes to writing,
You're gunna Get Sick Or Bite Tryin' so why try lying to me?
There's too much against you, so why try denying defeat?
Fuck with me? Now you gunna be bound to heaven,
You goin' have multiple blackouts like Eminem in 2007.


EDIT: Forgot a word in a line. And the subliminals werent meant as disses just needed shit to play off. :smoking:
Last edited by Solace on Oct 7th, '09, 03:07, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Spyder » Oct 6th, '09, 23:37

SHOTS FIRED :o
jk i saw the cliffnote type thing

but pretty ill man, shown up those newbies :y:
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Robbie G » Oct 6th, '09, 23:46

Classtheking = ethered
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby classthe_king » Oct 6th, '09, 23:48

:o Not cool :shakehead:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Solace » Oct 7th, '09, 01:31

Thanks nukkas.
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 7th, '09, 05:28

Uh-oh gettin pretty ill with the punches Sol :D Man Combinin the punches with the multis is crazy man. Real hot little drop dude keep at it man :worship:
lol on the ClasstheKing shoutout :whistle:
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby JMG » Oct 7th, '09, 06:04

I beg to differ your pretty stupid man sorry

anyway another dope piece from solace, hit me up for a collab homie.
JMG wrote: so are you gonna come fight me or not

Menzo wrote:No, I HAVE something to live for.
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby JMG » Oct 7th, '09, 08:17

A braindead fuck? how original..
JMG wrote: so are you gonna come fight me or not

Menzo wrote:No, I HAVE something to live for.
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby SajN » Oct 7th, '09, 08:20

Hey hey hey, calm down guys.
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 7th, '09, 18:05

Yo man save all that for another forum yall
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Solace » Oct 7th, '09, 21:56

Amadeo wrote:it's you're. as in, "hi JMG, you're a braindead fuck."

If you're going to make fun of his grammar then why didn't you capitalize the first letters in your sentence. Ironic.

But thanks for the feed guys, and about putting the quotes around it, if I had just wrote "Ya worse than ma hiney" then I would just seem like I'm an idiot haha, I like the way it points it out iight?
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 8th, '09, 21:01

Solace wrote:
Amadeo wrote:it's you're. as in, "hi JMG, you're a braindead fuck."

If you're going to make fun of his grammar then why didn't you capitalize the first letters in your sentence. Ironic.

But thanks for the feed guys, and about putting the quotes around it, if I had just wrote "Ya worse than ma hiney" then I would just seem like I'm an idiot haha, I like the way it points it out iight?


Yo I like the quotations so I won't miss any punches on accident. Keep rockin homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Oct 8th, '09, 21:07

eminem and 50 reference were strong..haha.... :y:
good piece man..enjoyed reading
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Re: More Than Creative Writing (Quick 16)

Postby Solace » Oct 9th, '09, 22:42

Thanks C Rizzo and yah hah
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