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11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '09, 02:42

Such an unperfect beauty yet I can only see it perfect,
They say beauty is in the eyes of the beholder but mine arent working,
And all these words I'm certain cause her such a burden,
So I feel worthless and even behind the curtain I find no purpose,
Now my "innocent soul" that you were so eager and willing to hold,
Is beginning to fold since the temperature has dropped and I cant stop feeling so cold,
They say snake eyes all came when you play dice in the rain,
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,
At my core I was born with straight ice in my veins,
I mean what if the moon did fall who's hand would I hold,
I need two more cause mine are just too cold,
Guess I was never shown the start so all of these hopes of us are,
Blown apart in the frozen part of my broken heart,
I mean did you see her hips she's off gettin meager tips though she's lost sittin,
You can't see her gift so she tossed her vision and if you'd have seen her wrist you'd know the cost of livin,
She let of my hand so now my fingers are frostbitten,
It's so cold thats my screams cease in this extreme heat,
No more dreams please they never bring relief,
Every word I sing bleeds until I do more than just seem weak,
With my violin strings tweaked I wonder why it brings ease,
To cry when my bitturfly wings freeze,
Even though the cold makes this letter rhyme still think I'd be better blind,
You'll never find a better time to be frozen in formaldahyde,
And now if only I could only show her a place much less colder,
I've said cold a million times and still the winter isnt over,
I just want to dismiss this distance and kiss when we're finished,
But it's 11:12 onmy frozen clock guess I just missed my wish by a minute.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 02:54

They say snake eyes all came when you play dice in the rain,
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,
At my core I was born with straight ice in my veins,

^that was crazy dope....lol and this is a tight concept with 11:12 on a clock
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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '09, 02:59

Fa-Q wrote:They say snake eyes all came when you play dice in the rain,
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,
At my core I was born with straight ice in my veins,

^that was crazy dope....lol and this is a tight concept with 11:12 on a clock


ha yeah thanks homie. I wrote that in Hujings class. The one with you and Andrea :P long time ago just never put it up
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 03:07

Yah-hah wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:They say snake eyes all came when you play dice in the rain,
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,
At my core I was born with straight ice in my veins,

^that was crazy dope....lol and this is a tight concept with 11:12 on a clock


ha yeah thanks homie. I wrote that in Hujings class. The one with you and Andrea :P long time ago just never put it up

lol was it the time i was telling you a fucking story and you snuck your ipod earbud in al sneaky
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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '09, 03:08

Fa-Q wrote:
Yah-hah wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:They say snake eyes all came when you play dice in the rain,
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,
At my core I was born with straight ice in my veins,

^that was crazy dope....lol and this is a tight concept with 11:12 on a clock


ha yeah thanks homie. I wrote that in Hujings class. The one with you and Andrea :P long time ago just never put it up

lol was it the time i was telling you a fucking story and you snuck your ipod earbud in al sneaky


Hahahahah yeah I'm pretty sure. I forgot all about that :tounge2:
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 2nd, '09, 21:25

For those that don't understand the concept there is a saying that when the clock says 11:11 you are supposed to make a wish.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 3rd, '09, 20:51

Man, I loved this shit. I really did. Tight concept, it flowed good and great rhyme scheme. And I'd love to hear you spittin in the audio section.

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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 3rd, '09, 20:59

Wic_Kid wrote:Man, I loved this shit. I really did. Tight concept, it flowed good and great rhyme scheme. And I'd love to hear you spittin in the audio section.

:y: :y: :y:


Yeah I know me too cause no one seems to get my flow. Got no mic though :'( Appreciate it homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Wallace » Nov 4th, '09, 00:28

This piece was true dopeness :8) It has unexpected rhymes and very original lines. The concept really inspired you good :8)
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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 4th, '09, 03:48

Wallace wrote:This piece was true dopeness :8) It has unexpected rhymes and very original lines. The concept really inspired you good :8)


Wallace been awhile seen I seen you :P thanks homie
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Wallace » Nov 4th, '09, 15:56

I've been busy studyin', drummin' and readin' books, hearin' music, kinda restin from net a little... so I don't visit most sections these days, just the download and news ones, from most of the forums I have account... :p
I feel like I can try to write on english too and post here, but I feel lazyness, its easier to write in portuguese, my original language...
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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 4th, '09, 20:35

Wallace wrote:I've been busy studyin', drummin' and readin' books, hearin' music, kinda restin from net a little... so I don't visit most sections these days, just the download and news ones, from most of the forums I have account... :p
I feel like I can try to write on english too and post here, but I feel lazyness, its easier to write in portuguese, my original language...

hahahahahahah yeah man I got you. Used to be with a girl from Brazil. So my portuguese is a bit rusty but I see you :P
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby embm » Nov 4th, '09, 20:45

We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,


this & all of it was nice :worship: :y:
gr8 rhymes
nice interestin topic
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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 4th, '09, 20:55

embm wrote:
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,


this & all of it was nice :worship: :y:
gr8 rhymes
nice interestin topic


Ha thanks bro
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 11:12 on my frozen clock

Postby embm » Nov 4th, '09, 21:01

Yah-hah wrote:
embm wrote:
We just play mice in this game play nice and you'll stay,
Pain's twice the slice to gain but the price is the same,


this & all of it was nice :worship: :y:
gr8 rhymes
nice interestin topic


Ha thanks bro


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