Where Did It Go Wrong?

[mcZu]

A very emotional piece, I couldn't get myself to post all of it... Maybe I will in the future, feedback is appreciated as always.


Where Did It Go Wrong?
Listen, yeah... ahh...

It’s like a huge hole is punched through my chest
I mean I had a hunch but the truth hurts to an extend
That is wrecking me apart from the inside and
My heart feels like it lost one side the other hit an end
One side acapella the other hidden and
Wordless yet clear as 60 seconds ticking in one minute man
Does she mean it? Damn…
It’s me that is damned yet I still care about her
The moment was ours second to being timeless yet sour
These feelings are rhyme less and my mind is powered
By depression so my state of mind is pressing
On my judgment which is clouded and dressed in
A tuxedo concealing the truth, so whether
Depression reigns or not I lost her and that is what matters
She claims it’s my own fault.. I shouldn’t have asked her
Because now I’m blaming myself and it’s useless, ha..
I could have put the relationship in stone but I was to afraid to face medusa
My face tries to cover the pain of a hell just for a girl
I guess pain needs to be embraced if you want to feel true grandeur
It feels like I hit an end to the normal daily slur
No it’s just a daily blur only urge I got left is to write
Yes, I’m hurt, I just want to scream and curse ‘cause there is no light
Yeah.. right, it all flew away like a storm capturing a kite
I picture what happened and I start to cry…
Teardrops get absorbed by the paper while I cry and cry
Oh, why, why oh why… People say lies are bad
But the truth hurts even more when you know that
The following happened, so try to keep up with the facts…

I can't get myself to post the rest right now, so I'm sorry for that...

[classthe_king]

Wow, loved it. Much respect for pieces like this.

[Emadyville]

I couldn't really find the flow in this, idk if you wrote this to a beat or just wrote it to write, but the ending was very powerful

[gutawafang]

My face tries to cover the pain of a hell just for a girl
I guess pain needs to be embraced if you want to feel true grandeur

Totally loved it. Deserves a second read.

[mcZu]

Wow, loved it. Much respect for pieces like this.

Thanks Class, appreciate it, man.

I couldn't really find the flow in this, idk if you wrote this to a beat or just wrote it to write, but the ending was very powerful

Wrote it to a simple yet powerful beat, guitar lids and a deep piano melody. Thanks Emady, appreciate it.

I felt it man great stuff, deserves a Budden beat and I chick singing on the chorus, good stuff

if you ever need a shoulder to cry own Zu...i'm here man

Thanks Cole, yeah a Budden beat would suit perfect, and a hot chick doing the chorus, lol. And thanks for the shoulder-offer. Appreciate it.

My face tries to cover the pain of a hell just for a girl
I guess pain needs to be embraced if you want to feel true grandeur

Totally loved it. Deserves a second read.

Thanks Guta, appreciate it, bro.

[mcZu]

Bump.