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Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

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Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

Postby Just Silver » Oct 23rd, '09, 00:52

Stale air from weed jail bares the seed
of failed destinys that are blessed beasts
from a reckoned feed sullen second beef
dull and stuck with yeast a slut with cum to breathe
and what ive come to be just another culkin flick
fuckin with your shit thugs begin to quick and resin becomes so thick
fesants of holy bricks get the re up passion
presence of all of it stolen from the masses
explosions and the crashes lines without the dashes
picture frames taken name cameras wit the flashes
im forever askin sign another sap with
an endless rhymin bastard who spends his time with mad libs
and sleeps and prays for month checks
and hasnt done enough yet blastin with a gun vet
who supposed to be a roughneck
the other ship arent sunk yet
so i need this one bet keep my fuckin tongue wet
spittin with some dumb debt
liftin not blown up yet
gift is what i obtain here
nifty lookin name here carved into a reindeer
killin happiness buildin crappiness
of this wack i live go insane attack ya kids
membrane lost out the door its final
can change nos tanks injected into spinal
get fucked off of nitrous
accept it ranges when the pain is through the cyphers
expect some progress especially my niche
respectin the game as if it were my bitch
(something new i tried lots of multis tell me what u think)
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Re: Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

Postby mcZu » Oct 23rd, '09, 00:58

Nice, structure kinda odd though. Flow seems on point and the multies are dope. Spottin'
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Re: Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

Postby Just Silver » Oct 23rd, '09, 01:01

mcZu wrote:Nice, structure kinda odd though. Flow seems on point and the multies are dope. Spottin'

Thanks im gonna try this new style from now on more often :happy:
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Re: Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 23rd, '09, 05:08

Multis are on point homie
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Multi Attempt Take One(keystyle)

Postby gutawafang » Oct 23rd, '09, 07:09

Not bad multis attempt homie. :y:
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