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Postby gutawafang » Oct 26th, '09, 02:24

I'm trapped in a room where all there is
Is just a pen, a notepad, but war exists
In my head, cannons firing but the fact is
It's just my mind putting skills into practice
So you see it's fairness, my fair bit of justice
That even the judges couldn't get past this
Remember that you're forgetting too fast, bitch
I'm putting your trustworthiness to test, snitch
Can't you see that the point is, it's disappointing?
That this heart here's you destroying and exploiting?
Weakening me, you been making me cry, it's annoying
Well I'm annoyed cuz our relationship, you destroying
Our friendships, don't you remember us in that room?
Don't you realize that we'll all be dead soon?
I'm upset you forgot me, wasn't we so close?
I treasured us the most, but this is how it goes

You're worse than anybody with Senile Dementia
Worse than Alzheimer's Disease I tell ya
Forgetting though it's just a mile's departure
While I remember though this is nostalgia

I'm trapped in a bubble, rose thorns couldn't burst it
Because you put a spell on it, you fucking cursed it
And you make me taste the salty tears running to my chin
Nothing's gonna stop this fear, even if you have me pinned
I'm not gonna need you anymore, I just need this pen
To express my feelings to whoever that comprehends
I know I don't have the right to make you repent
Neither do I need you to act, lie and pretend
Don't give me two faces, bitch, you forgot me
You even forgot my name, you can't say it properly
I know I ain't a worthy motherfucking property
But you felt awkward when you talked with me
I'm sick of using rhymes to remind you to remember me
I'm sick with this phobia that's been haunting me
I'm upset you forgot me, wasn't we so close?
I treasured us the most, but this is how it goes

You're worse than anybody with Senile Dementia
Worse than Alzheimer's Disease I tell ya
Forgetting though it's just a mile's departure
While I remember though this is nostalgia
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Re: You forgot

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 26th, '09, 02:28

Liked er'rything but the chorus...seems like it should be more heartfelt (thechorus) but the flow and lyrics were there...good job overall
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Re: You forgot

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 26th, '09, 02:31

that was dope :worship:
I loved the flow, the multies, the chrous, everything was there
I could feel the emotion you put into this :worship:
very dope
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Re: You forgot

Postby gutawafang » Oct 26th, '09, 02:36

Fa-Q wrote:Liked er'rything but the chorus...seems like it should be more heartfelt (thechorus) but the flow and lyrics were there...good job overall

Thanks for the comments. I'll look into it. ;)

DerdyPK wrote:that was dope :worship:
I loved the flow, the multies, the chrous, everything was there
I could feel the emotion you put into this :worship:
very dope

Thank you man. :y:
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Re: You forgot

Postby gutawafang » Oct 27th, '09, 02:14

Menzo wrote:YES FISH! :worship:

YES!!! :worship:
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