Wack Rappers R.I.P

[lilrossy]

im sellin' wack rappers addresses cuz da scene is plain,
rappers rappin' real, we gon kill da imaginers & clean da game,
fuck mainstream & u skirt wearin' mary's floatin' down it,
ya jerks, we tryna prove Nas wrong, fuck us up, wont allow it,
u know i'll, grab a gat & pop ya, i'll fuckin' 2pac ya,
fuckin got ya, big papa, have yo mumma askin 'who shot ya'
dude what cha got, jus fuckin hopes, so stop, watch,
& take notes on how i jump to new levels like hopscotch,
i shot scotch till eyes blood shot & i still flow better,
im top notch, breakin' thru like blood clots, ur so fed up,
cuz im gettin' this dough, this chedda, yo u beter just go,
just leave, before i busta flow, shred ya & crush ya soul,
yo, it's Ro$$y da kid, i must, i must, bust & spit,
trust me, dont fuck with this, i'll kill & bury ya kids,
ADHD?, it must be, the way i snap, i'll fuckin rip thru jack, (fuckin hacks)
the shit ya'll spit's been seen before, like a strippers crack.

wrote it pretty quick, jus wanna know wat ya's think.

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im sellin' wack rappers addresses cuz da scene is plain,
rappers rappin' real, we gon kill da imaginers & clean da game,
fuck mainstream & u skirt wearin' mary's floatin' down it,
ya jerks, we tryna prove Nas wrong, fuck us up, wont allow it,
u know i'll, grab a gat & pop ya, i'll fuckin' 2pac ya,
fuckin got ya, big papa, have yo mumma askin 'who shot ya'
dude what cha got, jus fuckin hopes, so stop, watch,
& take notes on how i jump to new levels like hopscotch,
i shot scotch till eyes blood shot & i still flow better,
im top notch, breakin' thru like blood clots, ur so fed up,
cuz im gettin' this dough, this chedda, yo u beter just go,
just leave, before i busta flow, shred ya & crush ya soul,
yo, it's Ro$$y da kid, i must, i must, bust & spit,
trust me, dont fuck with this, i'll kill & bury ya kids,
ADHD?, it must be, the way i snap, i'll fuckin rip thru jack, (fuckin hacks)
the shit ya'll spit's been seen before, like a strippers crack.

wrote it pretty quick, jus wanna know wat ya's think.

One of the most confusing name drops, next to the Game's.

1. Is your Nas drop dissing Nas? Because it doesn't make sense if it is.

2. To say you'll 2Pac somebody doesn't mean you'll kill them, sorry. Around 1.8 people die every second, so you're being extremely broad... no offense. 2Pac got killed; he didn't kill himself. And that drop was plain disrespectful. Let the man rest in paece.

3. Big Papa is spelled wrong. Not to mention the line just fucking confuses the shit out of me...

Sorry if I'm being a criticizing jerk, but those name-drops annoyed me.

Decent verse overall. Try to focus less on bragging on how many ways you can kill someone and how awesome you are and drop facts that really hit harder, if you're trying to do this kind of "Fuck Mainstream" theme, or it turns out like you're bitching about the current state of hip hop, instead of expressing your views in a mature manner.

[Emadyville]

Yeah this was real gangsta, and unless your really killing people don't say, we have enough fake gangstas in the game as is. And some rhymes weren't bad, you had a few multi's, but overall it was just decent in that category. Flow was kinda rough with those long lines.

Didn't mean to sound like an ass, that's just my honest feedback, keep writing

[gutawafang]

HAHAHAHA. Nice multis. Fun to read.

[lilrossy]

1. Is your Nas drop dissing Nas? Because it doesn't make sense if it is.

2. To say you'll 2Pac somebody doesn't mean you'll kill them, sorry. Around 1.8 people die every second, so you're being extremely broad... no offense. 2Pac got killed; he didn't kill himself. And that drop was plain disrespectful. Let the man rest in paece.

3. Big Papa is spelled wrong. Not to mention the line just fucking confuses the shit out of me...

1. nas made a song called hip hop is dead, so im sayin lets step up the game lyrically and save it.
2. read Amadeo reply
3. who gives a fuck if it's spelled wrong, this ain't no spelling bee for fuck sake. i said big poppa bcuz he had a song who shot ya, and i was jus sayin ur mum will be askin the same thing.

Yeah this was real gangsta, and unless your really killing people don't say, we have enough fake gangstas in the game as is. And some rhymes weren't bad, you had a few multi's, but overall it was just decent in that category. Flow was kinda rough with those long lines.

Didn't mean to sound like an ass, that's just my honest feedback, keep writing

thanx for the feed. it wasnt suppose to come accross that im a gangsta and shit, i was just tryna make it good lyrically (tryed to use multis and shit better) at the same time as releasing anger at these bugglebum bullshit records.

HAHAHAHA. Nice multis. Fun to read.

thanx alot, been practicing.

One of the most confusing name drops, next to the Game's.

1. Is your Nas drop dissing Nas? Because it doesn't make sense if it is.

i'm pretty sure the line's saying they're gonna prove nas wrong as in, hip hop isn't dead.

the "2pac ya" line was just saying he'll get a gun & shoot you, like tupac did a few times (didn't he shoot 2 cops?)

anyway.. this was better than 90% of the shit i read in CW.

thanx alot man, some one who gets it, haha. thanx for tyna to explain, appreciate it.

[emzee-frenzy]

is 2pac a verb? , well if so 2pac some shit that makes sense so we can 2pac some feed up for you, 2pac.

[BILI]

is 2pac a verb? , well if so 2pac some shit that makes sense so we can 2pac some feed up for you, 2pac.

lmfao

[classthe_king]

One of your better pieces. Had some nice multi's. Still some structural errors though.

[lilrossy]

thanx everyone for the feedbak, glad you liked it, and its good to hear im improving, cheers.