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couple bars of something im workin on

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couple bars of something im workin on

Postby spitz2 » Oct 27th, '09, 07:39

not much, just some lines n want some opinions on how it is

i sip liqour n brew with a lit swisher its true/
makes me spit sicker than you dick lickers can do/
allow me to give you a quick list of the rules/
diss members of my crew n im dismemberin you/
shit is all over once his temper is through/
im bound to see red like when a wrist slitter is blue/


im tryin to keep the syllable goin....so...??
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Re: couple bars of something im workin on

Postby classthe_king » Oct 27th, '09, 15:33

Rhymes are pretty good.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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