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Where Did I Go? OH NO!

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Where Did I Go? OH NO!

Postby Tash8 » Oct 28th, '09, 05:05

if you say you the best, then you stealin my identity
can't be yourself? you depressed? here's an amphetamine
it ain't no lie,they call me king for a reason
cause i be buying 14 louie rags every season ((king louis 14))
and leave em in my palace at versailles
and i was just wondering, alice you and i
we can skip to wonderland and get high
believe i got the right weed, it's Cali certified
see, my flow always comes off easy
like your girl when i stick in my pee-pee
you claim to be a superstar and have plenty jets
yet i robbed your entire house and only charged pity theft
*uhhh hahaha* yup you got nothing left
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Re: Where Did I Go? OH NO!

Postby classthe_king » Oct 28th, '09, 05:09

haha, that King Louis 14 line was nice, but besides that ive seen you do better.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Where Did I Go? OH NO!

Postby Tash8 » Oct 28th, '09, 05:13

classthe_king wrote:haha, that King Louis 14 line was nice, but besides that ive seen you do better.


thanks

i felt my last 2 bars were the dopest though.. the one about pity theft.
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Re: Where Did I Go? OH NO!

Postby classthe_king » Oct 28th, '09, 05:19

Tash8 wrote:
classthe_king wrote:haha, that King Louis 14 line was nice, but besides that ive seen you do better.


thanks

i felt my last 2 bars were the dopest though.. the one about pity theft.


haha actually didn't get it at first, but after rereading it, yeah thats a nice line too :y:
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Re: Where Did I Go? OH NO!

Postby mcZu » Oct 28th, '09, 23:39

Liked the Louis XIV line, beside the ''pee-pee'' reference it was dope. Keep it up.
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