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Face of Scars

Postby classthe_king » Nov 1st, '09, 22:52

Lol, like before, wrote this real fast and i wanted to get some feed on it before i edited it and made the final verse.

Thinkin of a master plan
To get these hip hop heads eatin out my hand
Cause when you look at all the effort and time ive spent
You'll see ive dug deep but have only come up with lent
With a little luck ive went from no one straight to the top
If your contemplatin the drops you'll see im creatin a shock
Thats makin ya rock yo head, to some its a great mystery
But the second i taste victory im goingto make history
It ain't trickery, im comin right at you this is real spittin
The ideal written is nothing to what this spiels gettin
The steels hittin you like a crow bar, its so hard
My flow's charge will knock you out leavin yo throat scarred
My hopes large, so i will not tolerate this dull parade
I will step up and fight the system while ya'll afraid
I won't fall away, I'll come up with a face of scars
And then hit you with the beat till you taste the bars
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Face of Scars

Postby Spyder » Nov 1st, '09, 23:21

pretty ill man
had nice flow to it and some dope punches in there
keep at it :y:
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Re: Face of Scars

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 1st, '09, 23:50

classthe_king wrote:Lol, like before, wrote this real fast and i wanted to get some feed on it before i edited it and made the final verse.

Thinkin of a master plan
To get these hip hop heads eatin out my hand
Cause when you look at all the effort and time ive spent
You'll see ive dug deep but have only come up with lent

With a little luck ive went from no one straight to the top
If your contemplatin the drops you'll see im creatin a shock
Thats makin ya rock yo head, to some its a great mystery
But the second i taste victory im goingto make history
It ain't trickery, im comin right at you this is real spittin
The ideal written is nothing to what this spiels gettin
The steels hittin you like a crow bar, its so hard
My flow's charge will knock you out leavin yo throat scarred
My hopes large, so i will not tolerate this dull parade
I will step up and fight the system while ya'll afraid
I won't fall away, I'll come up with a face of scars
And then hit you with the beat till you taste the bars


If you're going to bite Rakim first 2 bars, make it less obvious. :shifty: :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Face of Scars

Postby classthe_king » Nov 2nd, '09, 03:10

da.relapse.lp wrote:
classthe_king wrote:Lol, like before, wrote this real fast and i wanted to get some feed on it before i edited it and made the final verse.

Thinkin of a master plan
To get these hip hop heads eatin out my hand
Cause when you look at all the effort and time ive spent
You'll see ive dug deep but have only come up with lent

With a little luck ive went from no one straight to the top
If your contemplatin the drops you'll see im creatin a shock
Thats makin ya rock yo head, to some its a great mystery
But the second i taste victory im goingto make history
It ain't trickery, im comin right at you this is real spittin
The ideal written is nothing to what this spiels gettin
The steels hittin you like a crow bar, its so hard
My flow's charge will knock you out leavin yo throat scarred
My hopes large, so i will not tolerate this dull parade
I will step up and fight the system while ya'll afraid
I won't fall away, I'll come up with a face of scars
And then hit you with the beat till you taste the bars


If you're going to bite Rakim first 2 bars, make it less obvious. :shifty: :shifty:


I knew i couldnt sneak it past you :shifty:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Face of Scars

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 2nd, '09, 04:25

classthe_king wrote:
da.relapse.lp wrote:
classthe_king wrote:Lol, like before, wrote this real fast and i wanted to get some feed on it before i edited it and made the final verse.

Thinkin of a master plan
To get these hip hop heads eatin out my hand
Cause when you look at all the effort and time ive spent
You'll see ive dug deep but have only come up with lent

With a little luck ive went from no one straight to the top
If your contemplatin the drops you'll see im creatin a shock
Thats makin ya rock yo head, to some its a great mystery
But the second i taste victory im goingto make history
It ain't trickery, im comin right at you this is real spittin
The ideal written is nothing to what this spiels gettin
The steels hittin you like a crow bar, its so hard
My flow's charge will knock you out leavin yo throat scarred
My hopes large, so i will not tolerate this dull parade
I will step up and fight the system while ya'll afraid
I won't fall away, I'll come up with a face of scars
And then hit you with the beat till you taste the bars


If you're going to bite Rakim first 2 bars, make it less obvious. :shifty: :shifty:


I knew i couldnt sneak it past you :shifty:

:shifty: You can't sneak past "da.relapse.lp". Once Stan, always Stan. :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Face of Scars

Postby classthe_king » Nov 2nd, '09, 04:29

Im going to quote that everytime in the eminem section when you get into an argument with someone :shifty:
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Re: Face of Scars

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 2nd, '09, 04:36

classthe_king wrote:Im going to quote that everytime in the eminem section when you get into an argument with someone :shifty:


Ends arguments fast, doesn't it? :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Face of Scars

Postby gutawafang » Nov 2nd, '09, 05:22

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