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Ego + 1

Postby J Roc » Nov 2nd, '09, 00:44

On Some Real Shit?? I can take you on a Ego Trip
He's So Sick U'll Lose Ya Parent's Like Lilo, Stitch
Reload Clips & Take the shot On Some Free Throw Shit
The Eagle Spit Den 'Rip You Open' Liike Dorito Chip's
See No Kid's , Play Hide & Seek Like That Nemo Fish
How Could i Be So Rich, Got 'Hands of green' Like Sheego Fists
We Know This, Say-im-wack 'Take-it-back' Like Repo, Bitch
You Prally Re-Wrote This, If Your Concept's Old You Get Deemed 06'
It's Like Ur Gun Only Shoot's Smoke Cuz Ur Heat Blow's 'Missed' (Mist)
I Say i Live in a 'Crack house' Cuz It's Made Out of Kilo 'Bricks'
But if i See Home's Hit?? The Gun'll blow it down u Don't Need No Pig's

Ego Pluss One A Old Crew i Started ,, Just a Piece i got into lol. Lightworkkk !
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Re: Ego + 1

Postby classthe_king » Nov 2nd, '09, 03:10

Not really any memorable or outstanding lines. But the rhyming throughout the whole thing was nice.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Ego + 1

Postby lilrossy » Nov 2nd, '09, 07:25

luv ur shit man, this no exeption. pretty dope for lightwork. keep it up :y:
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Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
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After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Ego + 1

Postby gutawafang » Nov 2nd, '09, 09:04

woah. that was dope man.

Multis, and the nameplay. :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Ego + 1

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 2nd, '09, 17:50

lots of metaphors and multi's

this piece flowed well but some of the lines lacked your usual punch
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Re: Ego + 1

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 2nd, '09, 17:54

Dope scheme roc :y: :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Ego + 1

Postby Solace » Nov 2nd, '09, 22:20

Not as good as your usual drops but it was dope nevertheless :y:
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