Learning to rap/rhyme

[EricGraham1987]

I looked at all the stickies and I read the rhyming tutorial but I am not even to the point where I can do it yet. Here is probably the best thing I've typed and its horrible.

his camaro lovin white boy is gonna school your lude, then you gonna be like fuck that dude! This camaro aint got no dubs and it aint gonna ever be no hood. You wanna drag race? Lets go to my base. Rear wheels gettin no traction. Your damn VTEC is takin all the action! You gain two car lengths but I pull through. This v8 aint gonna lose to you! Nope I finished the race with 5 lengths ahead, you roll up your windows and roll away I just sit there laughin. Silly little engine you cant touch this, I got double the cylinders but only half the valves.

I know it sucks you dont need to remind me but I want to get better. I honestly do but I have no direction and no one that knows how to rap.

[gutawafang]

first, fix the structure.

his camaro lovin white boy is gonna school your lude
then you gonna be like fuck that dude
This camaro aint got no dubs and it aint gonna ever be no hood

etc

[EricGraham1987]

Can you give me an example of how I could do that to my lame ass rap?

[gutawafang]

Can you give me an example of how I could do that to my lame ass rap?

I already did man.

Structure makes it easier to read, nothing much. but it's the basic.

[EricGraham1987]

OH I misunderstood. I dont even know how to fix the structure like that. I dont even know why its done like that in the first place. I know nothing about writing/typing raps.

[gutawafang]

OH I misunderstood. I dont even know how to fix the structure like that. I dont even know why its done like that in the first place. I know nothing about writing/typing raps.

basically it's the last word that rhymes rite? I mean, USUALLY rite?

so if you structur-ize your drop, people can see what words to rhyme.

[Yah-hah]

You really got a fresh camaro like that?

[EricGraham1987]

his camaro lovin white boy is gonna school your lude,
then you gonna be like fuck that dude!
This camaro aint got no dubs and it aint gonna ever be no hood.
You wanna drag race?
Lets go to my base
. Rear wheels gettin no traction.
Your damn VTEC is takin all the action!
You gain two car lengths but I pull through.
This v8 aint gonna lose to you
! Nope I finished the race with 5 lengths ahead,
you roll up your windows and roll away I just sit there laughin.
Silly little engine you cant touch this, I got double the cylinders but only half the valves.

Did I do that better? Thats my first attempt ever....

[BILI]

his camaro lovin white boy is gonna school your lude,
then you gonna be like fuck that dude!
This camaro aint got no dubs and it aint gonna ever be no hood.
You wanna drag race?
Lets go to my base
. Rear wheels gettin no traction.
Your damn VTEC is takin all the action!
You gain two car lengths but I pull through.
This v8 aint gonna lose to you
! Nope I finished the race with 5 lengths ahead,
you roll up your windows and roll away I just sit there laughin.
Silly little engine you cant touch this, I got double the cylinders but only half the valves.

Did I do that better? Thats my first attempt ever....

yes its better
but put more word in your lines,so that they all have almost same size
example
********************************************dude
********************************************hood
********************************************race
********************************************base
wheres * just wit it wit some words

[EricGraham1987]

Okay and now that I'm looking at it more it will help me rhyme and rap more often. SO what other tips to a newb? How did you guys end up being able to rhyme words together? I'm not tryin to be no eminem or tupac or anything like that. Just good enough to hold my own.

[Fa-Q]

First off...don't write about cars...that's what shitty southern rappers that destroy hiphop...once you stop singing about that find a real subject your passionate about or something that makes you sad...then just start writing..and if you need to look how to write look at anything by Spyder, MC annonomous, McZu, or Solace...see how they write

[Just Silver]

a good tip is to study other people stuff on this forum i cant stress enough multis multis multis
this means multi syllable
EX: Shot clocks blood clots interstate cops the point is your flow is gettin stopped

Better example from Eminem
Intimidator simulator of data eliminator theres never been a greater

[Yah-hah]

Yeah man pick a subject to really focus on like wordplay, punches multies stuff like that. There will be someone on this site that really excels in that particular category and just study that. Like multie cats are everywhere, Me, gutawafag, sSolace Zu MCAnon Fa-Q alot of cats, J Roc is king of wordplay and punches, Anon is pretty beastly there too. Just a few off the top of my head. But just study the vets and you'll find your own little style man. Just let it come naturaly like when your just chillin start rhymin about watever and that how you can be able to just rhyme crazy off the top by practicin. Keep ya head up homie and stay at it.

[EricGraham1987]

Rap about something important and emotional? I can sure do that I Think.

We all have problems right?
I can sit here and type
My mom cant sit there and die
shes a lot stronger than i
cerebral ataxia got her down
damn this thing we call a god
lookin at my mom not a thing I can do
she was here my whole life wheres the proof?
she wants to walk she wants to live
all I can do is sit here and waste away
not doin nothin with my life no pride
I cant sit here but do anything other than hide

I thought of that in like 2 minutes I Know its horrible but its off the top of my head without any revisions....Where did I go wrong?

[gutawafang]

Yeah man pick a subject to really focus on like wordplay, punches multies stuff like that. There will be someone on this site that really excels in that particular category and just study that. Like multie cats are everywhere, Me, gutawafag, sSolace Zu MCAnon Fa-Q alot of cats, J Roc is king of wordplay and punches, Anon is pretty beastly there too. Just a few off the top of my head. But just study the vets and you'll find your own little style man. Just let it come naturaly like when your just chillin start rhymin about watever and that how you can be able to just rhyme crazy off the top by practicin. Keep ya head up homie and stay at it.