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Chunky Bars Attempt 1(keystyle)

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Chunky Bars Attempt 1(keystyle)

Postby Just Silver » Nov 3rd, '09, 04:34

Exoskeleton alien features, lets be relevant hannibal cleavers
mandible leakers blood spurting teachers one word to teach us "god" can not preach us,
arctic blue steel on a beamer, ufo lookin, get trashed like Katrina get smashed like the speakers
of which that brings up melodies of felonies and ways to get the cheese up, rap.. medias jesus
perimeter finished her, smoking that reefer,... a quota of a sofa, sit watch oprah while i kick back
fold down like poker,.. see them carbon doors drop, smoke stars go hard make the orbit stop
country peeps got film and they call the cops, dont believe. conceive at a dating spot
hunters go for us, like no tomorrow, dunces feel tapped, like im going for them
but thats a def not, not sayin i cant, but this block has enough of a lack of a chance
to see a poor fucker, in baggier pants, red skull like raggedy anne, bed bug infesting your skin
step son, molested in france, wow thats what i call a bagette you "suck" i "ball" faggot
i tuck and roll past this puck in goal bastards shucks im sold cash-is, gesture of jesters (shrinks)lector inspectors best of the DECA marketin lectures spark givem scepters park and deflectem parting my rep-its-war
(quick fat bars tried different flow) put commas to help u understand how it goes
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Re: Chunky Bars Attempt 1(keystyle)

Postby classthe_king » Nov 3rd, '09, 04:41

wow, your getting alot better :y: maybe its time to move on past keystyles.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Chunky Bars Attempt 1(keystyle)

Postby Just Silver » Nov 3rd, '09, 04:54

classthe_king wrote:wow, your getting alot better :y: maybe its time to move on past keystyles.

i think i might eventually its just real hard for me to sit still lol
plus whats weird is the way i do write when i write i jot notes and have diagrams and math equations and takes a long ass time... But great feed hopin for more... p.s if its not too much to ask please comment on my last didnt get any feed on it
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Re: Chunky Bars Attempt 1(keystyle)

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 3rd, '09, 05:20

Holy shit on the word play :o good multis...I don't see why there should be a second attempt
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