Life of Poverty(short song/freewrite)1st attempt

[Just Silver]

So sick and tired of being in an hour of need, nowhere to go, it gets harder to breathe
somewhere some woes, are just outta my reach, livin this life of poverty(2x)

Recession, economy, dichotomy buy all of these, fake handouts, am i voluble, relax digest its soluble,
wait my whole life just to live, why have a kid when you cant budg-et, cant get movin, cant budge shit
sell drugs, give up,suffer-in,..bloodshot eyes through bloodshot minds, thinking its a one shot crime,
but it never stops, it goes round n round, shit flows from town to town, just like a plague went down
but i pray im down,cant get any lower,..basketball life make it take it from em,half my property stolen
confused catcher ask Holden,... Arrive early hope the gates are open.

So sick and tired of being in an hour of need, nowhere to go, it gets harder to breathe
somewhere some woes, are just outta my reach, livin this life of poverty(2x)

Synchronize,directed mental signs,take fentanyl stay alive, stay numb to the deficit, rather fake death i quit been through stress from early youth, money game of chess through servitude, gotta serve the dudes or im locked, better or worse a nines cocked, gets dark, shine stops, got to check out your blind spots, if not declined drop, to what ive been gettin at, stay away be afraid be aristocrat, in another way i wouldnt have artistic crafts, as such as rap, id have a bunch a crap, decoy friends, a hit on me, armored benz from the shots fired that u call ur men,excited to be born so poor, precisely what gets me past this morgue

So sick and tired of being in an hour of need, nowhere to go, it gets harder to breathe
somewhere some woes, are just outta my reach, livin this life of poverty(2x)

(slightly written mostly keystyle tryin to get choruses and flow down ***commas help u understand how my flow goes flow)

[gutawafang]

I can tell it's mostly freestyle. The flow disappeared at the 2nd line of the "verse".

Quite okay to me. Few simple multis.

[AOBrien09]

Quite good, a know it's kind of a freestyle but the structure need's work, also like said ^ the flow of the 2nd verse seem's abit off, but decent drop.

[Just Silver]

At the time i thought it was gonna turn out real good but it sorta backfired its good but not what i expected
cant get into writing im stickin to the keystyles for a while