First Verse in my new song

[Fa-Q]

I have a street to pave,
To do so, I have to cheat my grave,
A seat to save, my feets a slave,
To my own self, but this beats brave,
And it keeps me sain,
And at night sleeps my pain,
At day break, I try and stay awake,
I see places in my mind,
I have faces to find,
As I taste the wine,
As I chase time,
I chase time, like the minute hand chases the hour hand,
Just a second, I'm so weak, I don't have the power to stand,
I feel like I have the world, all on my shoulders,
Defending something bigger than me, like fallen soldiers,
I feel alone, like a candle in darkness, trying to bring light,
Or like a bird, nervous, worried if I'll sing right,
I dream at night, that my heart turns peaceful,
But I seem to fight, and if there's a gleam of light,
A glimmer of hope, I'll try and find it,
But it seems I fall from the thinner rope,
And know even a winner can choke,


No matter how long the rain,
This songs the same,
I'll always be strong through pain,
No matter if I'm wrong in vain,
Ill always be strong through pain,

[mcZu]

I dream at night, that my heart turns peaceful,

That line didn't fit in with the rhyme scheme. Besides that it's dope, I like the chorus and the verse was written pretty good. Keep it up.

[embm]

I dream at night, that my heart turns peaceful,

That line didn't fit in with the rhyme scheme.

yea
but good shit
cant wait 2 hear mo

[Yah-hah]

Yeah dope hook man

[Fa-Q]

I dream at night, that my heart turns peaceful,

That line didn't fit in with the rhyme scheme. Besides that it's dope, I like the chorus and the verse was written pretty good. Keep it up.

Lol yea I meant to take that part out but I guess I didn't save it and thanks Jus, Zu, and embm

[Emadyville]

I liked it

[Fa-Q]

Thanks Em-ville