mEnTaL bReAkDoWn! Part II

[lilrossy]

this follows on from the fisrt drop. its just one long verse no chorus, and im still writing it, so here goes sum more.

Hollow as all within, show no sore, im colder then wind,
holdin' the ball, a metaphor for feelin's, im holdin' them in,
were do i began, arrivin' by myself at the holiday inn,
wishin' that my facial expression was as bright as my skin,
but im fightin' within, i cant win, pain is to strong,
like akon, cant stand the rain, tryna sustain for to long,
cant explain the amount of strain on my brain, goin inzane,
wana be slained, was happy once, but it came and its gone,
since i was born, the game has been on, but im fallin' behind,
been stallin' with time, havent been tryin', always brawlin' with crime,
been appalling and blind, fool away any day and time,
wana find my way but im in the wrong state of mind,
constent teachers sayin' stay behind, im always in strife,
they like, ur wastin' ur time, wat are ya doin with life,
well i know im not that bright, but gimmie a pen and i'll write,
tell ya how ive been and how i fight, and what its like,
to try and overight ur memories overnight, cuz mam,
godamn, while ur life is grand, im jus tryna stand,
to be specific, feels like i swam the pacific only to be slammed,
and scamed as a man, oh terrific, guees this is gods plan,
huh, well fuck it, here i am.

thats all i got for now, tell us wat ya think.

[Just Silver]

quite good flow wise could be more complex
damnn u just joined and have been posting ur ass off good work keep on doin what your doing
Spottin big time

[lilrossy]

thanx for da feedbak man, good lookin out.
btw been here for ova 2 years, so thats not really classified as jus joining.

[RapName]

damnn u just joined and have been posting ur ass off

Yeah, he's insane. One post every third day for the last two years! In average, that is...

And lilrossy^^ Nice work man, good rhyming! Keep it up, really liked the flow to

[lilrossy]

hah, thanx man, appreciate it.

[Just Silver]

thanx for da feedbak man, good lookin out.
btw been here for ova 2 years, so thats not really classified as jus joining.

didnt see the 2oo7 i just figured it was 2009 beacuse how many posts you had and joined november lmao

[lilrossy]

haha, nah thats kewl.