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Postby RealSickLindley » Nov 9th, '09, 03:46

I go on another rapping site, and i have beef with a dude, and it's quite personal, this is the verse i've done in an unlimited lines final battle..

*Background*
He's called Matt the Ripper
From Canada but talks really gangsta
Used to be in a crew together called Asylum, and he let it die, even though he was technically in charge, while i repped it til the death, taking on like 3 dudes at a time in Open Mic
Had a sig saying "Autotune>UK accents"
Was a laughing stock for ages for his fake style, and i defended him
Called me a kid, when he's 24, and i'm 18
Got pissed when i brought up how much he drank
Ripped me for drinking something weird called a "Shit mix" in a Uni picture
We started arguing in a thread by a guy who i was also beefing with called Lucky D, he moved the argument in to a section called "Fuck Y'all"
Lucky messaged me, we patched things up, and he dissed Matt
Made a thread recently asking where a member called McWoods had disappeared to
He said to be on Facebook that i couldn't say "n****" in a status quoting lyrics, even though it was editted like that ^^^
And he's in the bottom League still in our Battle League, while i'm in the top one


Sweet goodnight, when it comes to the crunch, can't pass the baton,
Cos i beat his hype, with just one punch, like money versus Hatton,
With his flow so droll, what do you want Matthew? A fuckin' drumroll?
You stole the A's soul, i'll have you, you have to dig your own hole,
Cos Matt's a killer, patronize my bars, when i'm by far, something iller,
Matt sit stiller, analyse your bars.. Oh those bars? That's the filler,
Cos Matt's a Ripper, it's true your name, he could only handle strippers,
Hear a bodybag zipper, but for you, don't fuck with ungodly bad fibbers,
Autotune over UK accents? Played it then, cos you say shit like a player,
I deal with fractions, Canadian? Isn't that just American.. But gayer :whistle:
Personality layers, your front shit headline, "Matt's louder than Claxon's"
In my prayers, mournin' a public punchline.. Shit.. I felt like the Jacksons,
Well he came street.. Deleted me off Facebook, Oh, it's personal now,
But you should know i restrain beef, like i repeatedly facefucked a cow,
Let's settle it now, i get heated, who let me loose with this old man?
Sweat on his brow, ego so beaten it's on a domestic abuse programme,
After this hit, it'll be slicing it's wrist, go flip your lid or clench your fist,
Give you the gist, calls me a kid, cos he's tense and he's honestly pissed,
Did i say pissed? I find it so easy to confuse the alcoholic, can't hold shit,
He's gripped, status' were always about booze, or the people that stole it :'(
I get twisted off weird shit, it's university, we have a thing called shit mix,
I risk it, think that's sick kid? You get beat so much on this shit, it's sadistic,
Think you can be sick without a punchline or a flip, and please never forget,
Captain goes with his ship, you were more worried about gettin' your feet wet,
Captain Courageous being the laughing stock, so what have you got?
Talking ages? Lock this battle with immortal style and an unstoppable knock,
I'd love to be paving the way, but then Matt stupidly tried saving the day,
We're not hearing you spray, we zone out like your wife talkin' 'bout her day,
So unlimited lines is wrong, why let him do it so long, droning his song,
Go sit with your bong, cos he's so far up his own arse, he's becoming his thong,
Me and Luck patched it up, and well done "grills", got a touch as a peacemaker,
We struck, but then shook on the opinion i had more skills and you were faker,
Contact me anytime, your boring, and your reputation is lookin' a bit grim,
Luck gets it in one try, "he's fuckin' annoyin', and i'm not even talkin' to him",
Your gangsta talk speaks for itself, and it's just really bothering me,
This wanksta talks up himself, he should just go write his own Biography,
Keep it, take my style and eat it, let it die, just stop thinkin' you're street kid,
Canadian thinks he's hip, wants to be "Classified", but this joke is no secret,
Let me guess, he'll diss my band, but we all don't have to go solo man,
He's stressed, cos the last time he beat someone, was himself with his hand,
He's consistent, he'll forever be in the bottom league, i'd take a flutter,
No resistence, so many L's, i thought you were calling Lucky, but had a stutter,
Twat covered in blood, if you're not scared by now, i suggest that you should,
Matt's after a tug, if you don't know by now, check his request for Wood,
I almost feel a bit sorry for this hyocrite, can we just stop fucking him?
Telling other people not to bitch.. That's like Kanye telling me to stop butting in,
You had no role, never had control, only "boss" that couldn't go fire me,
Personal shit takes its toll, yeah i ranted, but you're irritating in sobriety,
My style is ugly, it's so nasty it'll have Matt just heaving on sight,
Fuck me, this isn't a showdown, they want to see if you'll leave the site,
You feel the bite, "saved" Lucks thread, made a scene in Fuck Y'all section,
Kidding right? After that you carried on free posting, get out of your rectum!
Respect hmm? We should get you a campaign, raise some awareness,
'Bout how you were spectating, i was elevating, and how you couldn't care less,
Critisized me on facebook, using lyrics with the word n****, get gone,
Oh i see, i can't quote lyrics, but you can try and fail to get your "Swag On",
You act like you're havin' sex, i tease you, and then you come quick,
I regret lots, didn't want blind drops, Cal might delete yours before it's public,
I would, and to be honest, he should, before we hear a big *THUD*!
With a punch so good, you won't mention me again, like my names Shug,
You should be in adverts, to warn other rappers, i know the truth hurts,
604 as your location.. Gangsta.. Are you gangbangin' with Moose Herds? LOL
The mood turns, cos i bet your pride hurts from these harsh words and adverbs,
Call people herbs or bad words.. your shit has been flushed, and i don't mean turds..


It's a long piece, and it's annoying having the catch up with the background, but i think it's quite ruthless, and i put alot in to it..

Thanks
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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby Spyder » Nov 9th, '09, 03:50

to be honest man i dont think most peeps gonna have the attention span, i know u put alot of time into it, but we dont want alot of time reading it namean??

i read a lil, looks pretty good :y:

i would saved this, replaced some names and added personal and used em in battles on here...

then again as fag4life saw... we got peeps who will figure ya out :shifty:
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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby RealSickLindley » Nov 9th, '09, 03:55

"Personality layers, your front shit headline, "Matt's louder than Claxon's"
In my prayers, mournin' a public punchline.. Shit.. I felt like the Jacksons,
Well he came street.. Deleted me off Facebook, Oh, it's personal now,
But you should know i restrain beef, like i repeatedly facefucked a cow,
Let's settle it now, i get heated, who let me loose with this old man?
Sweat on his brow, ego so beaten it's on a domestic abuse programme
Did i say pissed? I find it so easy to confuse the alcoholic, can't hold shit,
He's gripped, status' were always about booze, or the people that stole it :'(
I get twisted off weird shit, it's university, we have a thing called shit mix,
I risk it, think that's sick kid? You get beat so much on this shit, it's sadistic,
Think you can be sick without a punchline or a flip, and please never forget,
Captain goes with his ship, you were more worried about gettin' your feet wet"

The highlight section for me, if you have a low attention span, just rate that bit :happy:

And thanks Spyder :y:
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Big l
Biggie Smalls
Royce Da 5'9"
Jigga

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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby Spyder » Nov 9th, '09, 03:59

that exerpt was pretty nice man

liked some of the punchlines like the feet wet part :b:
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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby D'Leh » Nov 9th, '09, 21:03

really nice but, too long man!!!
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby B.A.D. » Nov 9th, '09, 23:35

damn, great structure
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Re: Diss verse, feed would be great..

Postby RealSickLindley » Nov 10th, '09, 02:19

It's so long because it's a final, very personal battle, with alot of pride at stake.. And as i said, it's unlimited lines.. I can't be caught slacking and thinking "merrrhhh i'll do 16".

Thanks, i've improven my struture, i'll maybe post some of my Open's on here. I feel like i have the skills from various sites to make an impact on here. But i don't really know people on here, and the battling scene seems a bit static. But yeah, i'll drop the odd piece.
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Eminem
Big l
Biggie Smalls
Royce Da 5'9"
Jigga

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