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Close Your Eyes

Postby D'Leh » Nov 9th, '09, 21:01

Close your eyes, fall into a hypnotic state of mind,
Close your eyes, let your soul sink deep within the shrine,
Close your eyes, allow your body to relax, bones becoming confined ,
Close your eyes, with your breaths getting deeper, this feeling is undefined,
Close your eyes, your eyelids getting heavy, heart beat is slowing,
Close your eyes, you almost feel ready, you are no longer growing,
Close your eyes, the fear and pain has begun showing,
Close your eyes, death is the gift I am bestowing,
Close your eyes, you feel as though you are being lifted,
Close your eyes, if you hadnt you would not have drifted,
Close your eyes, you start to move, your legs have shifted,
Close your eyes, like some flour, your brains are sifted,
Close your eyes, no longer will you remain alert,
Close your eyes, you become one with the earth,
Close your eyes, you no longer feel pain or hurt,
Close your eyes, your body is placed beneath the dirt...

Close your eyes.....



PLZ ANY FEEDBACK ON THIS?????????
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby classthe_king » Nov 9th, '09, 21:38

What does the title have to do with the song :unsure:
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby D'Leh » Nov 10th, '09, 02:04

haha i really dont know!!!
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 10th, '09, 02:11

Why do you always put so much exclamation points after your sentences? Are you so excited while you're on this forum or what...? :confusion:
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby D'Leh » Nov 10th, '09, 03:03

fuck you, just that
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 10th, '09, 03:03

D'Leh wrote:fuck you, just that


What are you trying to say? :sweating:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby D'Leh » Nov 10th, '09, 03:04

idk why this wic kid says that, its for him
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 10th, '09, 03:05

D'Leh wrote:fuck you, just that

Fuck you, I was just askin you nicely!

jeez...
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby gutawafang » Nov 10th, '09, 03:20

I was almost hypnotized after reading this. It's a compliment. :y:
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Re: Close Your Eyes

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 10th, '09, 06:38

Kinda dig the concept. It seemed kinda one of thoe things you can just relax and read. Nicely done homie
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