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New King

Postby BILI » Nov 13th, '09, 12:01

Please pass me that paper and give me that pen
I`ll just write your name and you`ll be a dead man
I`ll pop you wit pallet gun and you`ll be fuckin dead
Everywhere fuckin red,ok bitch,I think nuff is said
Well now its time to kill someone,but nothin`s dead
Just look at me and that`ll be the reason you`re killed for
Murderin is in my blood,see thats what I`m built for
And this rap thing is also something I`m skilled for
See Ima rap matrix,and Ima teach you some basics
My rap is different,I`m the only person that makes it
Real,cause whatever I say in my raps I do it in real life
When I say I`ll stab you I`ll do it whit some real knife
Even I dont know whats wit me when I write my lyrics
All I know is that sometimes I get surrounded by spirits
They get the shape of Pac and Biggie,its like I`m wit kings
And they whisper me what shall I say in my writtings

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Re: New King

Postby BILI » Nov 13th, '09, 21:38

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Re: New King

Postby mcZu » Nov 13th, '09, 21:43

Flow is abit off, the amount of syllables in the lines aint the same. Try some more multies, and maybe wordplay. Keep it up, keep writing BILI, you'll get there.
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Re: New King

Postby BILI » Nov 13th, '09, 22:55

mcZu wrote:Flow is abit off, the amount of syllables in the lines aint the same. Try some more multies, and maybe wordplay. Keep it up, keep writing BILI, you'll get there.

thx for tips homie
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Re: New King

Postby classthe_king » Nov 14th, '09, 00:53

your gettin better, but ive seen the pics you've posted and these raps are the most fake things ever. If you use things that happened in your life in your verse they will come out better.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: New King

Postby BILI » Nov 14th, '09, 00:58

classthe_king wrote:your gettin better, but ive seen the pics you've posted and these raps are the most fake things ever. If you use things that happened in your life in your verse they will come out better.

thx man
but how can you know whats fake just based on pics :shifty:
but yeah they`re fake like almost every rap lyrics :flower:
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