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Fucked-up State of Mind.

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Fucked-up State of Mind.

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 14th, '09, 01:59

Check this lyrical great...
Woke up slowly in an ethereal state...
Seems like I ain't of material traits...
Mind trapped in the plane of infinity...
Feels like my very brain is divinity...
Something hurts; not the pain of virginity...
Look around and gaze at vicinity...
Whole area is just drained of affinity...

Did attempt to walk...
Slow-motion movement and then a block...
Freeze suddenly until when a shock...
Awakens me; weird that my pen can talk...
There's a dim light in my bedroom...
Reddish aura like Egyptian's dead tomb...
Or red like a mother's bled womb...
Not depressing though; light didn't shed gloom...

Drift to the open window...
Head so dizzy it's like I'm coked on indo...
Can't think; fall down; just moped in a limbo...
What the hell? Getting choked for a sin though...
Really hit the floor and struggle to stand...
Alarm clock is ticking; mind is muddled and bland...
Things getting out of control; buckle my hand...
Eyes widen and it's like I chuckle and stand...

Laugh and laugh and laugh...
Laugh and laugh and laugh and laugh....
Laugh and laugh and laugh and laugh on who's behalf...?
And then pass out...
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Fucked-up State of Mind.

Postby mcZu » Nov 14th, '09, 02:18

Dope, nice flow, mutlies and rhymes. Keep it up Mi.
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Re: Fucked-up State of Mind.

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 14th, '09, 03:39

Raised my I.Q. a little I think :P Dope flow man smart lyricism
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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