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Creativity Please

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 15th, '09, 00:27

I haven't gotten pussy in a while so I'm humping Furniture
life's bitch still some act like they've never Heard of Her

I'm the type of guy who shows women what their Curves Deserve
if sex is at home then I never have to run from First ta Third

but when it's your Turn ta Hurt you think only of your self
with these Words I Work endlessly to Merc a Verse

my enemies get buried six feet below the Earth in Dirt
Homicides On my Side they said your body wasn't Worth the Search

when a Massacre Occurs they pretty much know it Was Me
there will be no surivivors nobody gonna get that Lucky

even if their sucking on a Rabbit's Foot telling me that my Rap is Good
so if homicide comes around again I'm a tell um to Have a Look

breaking out your Body Parts before I rip them Cops Apart
laughing all crazy I'll be like look boys he ain't Got a Heart

then I'll jet so quick witnesses will say they heard a Sonic Boom
cuz I just Bombed the Moon, nasa please, we both know that Obama's Cool
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Re: Creativity Please

Postby mcZu » Nov 15th, '09, 00:39

Flow was shaky at some points, don't know if you wrote this to a beat or not. Multies are dope, rhymes too. Overal, not bad. Keep dropping Rain.
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Re: Creativity Please

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 15th, '09, 00:41

Decent enough, but there could be more punchlines if you are trying to be creative. :b:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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